It's so nice to have a cat by your side
Ones who love you
And make you laugh; smile; and be happy
You love them still
*
Having them rub up against you
Purring like a motorboat
Knowing it's because of you
Yet you love them still
*
Feeling their hot, fluffy bodies
As they playfully maul your toes
The cats bite you repeatedly
But you love them still
*
They rip up your belongings
Eat things they shouldn't
Drag out your shoelaces
And you love them still
*
Bugging you when you're busy
Getting cat fur everywhere
Tearing up and down the hallway at night
Once again, you love them still
*
Sleeping next to you at night
Waking up with you in the morning
Meowing for breakfast and looking up at you
Can't help it- you love them still
*
Causing so much commotion
Bringing you presents of deceased rodents
Getting in the garbage
Tis you love them still
*
Glaring at you when you take away their food
But laying on your lap in winter
Being treated like royal pets
You love them still
*
Being your best friend forever
Always there for a cuddle and hugs
Looking so adorable all the time
Forever you'll love them always
<3 love cats<3
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Aww.. This is really sweet great job catty (em) . I'm feel so happy after reading this. It's just like I could feel each and everything you wrote about. You know l always wanted a pet cat, but unfortunately my mom has animal phobia so I can't have one
but anyway I've always adored animals and one of my friends has a pet dog (bitch actually her name is qv) and you know what I go to her house only to meet her pretty little dog. Anyway someday I'll surely have a pet. Till then hoping for the best.
Fangirl~
AWEEEE I FEEL BAD FOR YOUR MOM and that's a .... "Nice" name for your friend's pet dog.
It I know it's a strange name but she is really cute ...
I don't really like cats, but this was a good poem. I've had many cats during my thirteen years of life
)) SO I've gotten a bit fed up of them.
)
I especially like the seventh stanza. "gifts of deceased rodents" HA. That was hilarious.
I think you should work on the first stanza, since it isn't really eye catching . ( no offence meant, just trying to be helpful
Keep it up! Write a poem about dogs next time! I love them.......... :3
Mysticalxx
Thank you for this review!!
I'm gad you enjoyed it! I've been thinking about writing about dogs, and I've had two, but right now I don't have any. Still, I'll probably create a poem about dogs!
Happy writing!
Hi again, Catlover211! cleverclogs here to review!
I'm already a crazy cat lady-in-training, so I can definitely relate to this poem. It makes me smile because it reminds me of me my three cats. I imagine them doing all these things when I read your poem, as I'm sure most cat owners do. It's so adorable and true. Cats are strange creatures, but we still love them for it. Of course, since this is a review, I need to give you some advice to help you improve, so here goes.
This is a minor thing, but those semicolons should be commas.
This is also minor, but why did you use "yet" in the final line of this stanza? The first three lines talk about good things that cats do, but the "yet" implies that you love cats in spite of these good things. It doesn't make sense. I'd recommend replacing it with something else.
Not a criticism, but this line is soooo one my cats. You pet him a few times, and then he starts biting you. "Playfully maul" is such a good description for this.
I actually have a positive and a negative thing for this line. Let's start with the negative. This line is a little clunky. "Deceased" sounds a bit too formal for the poem, and it sort of interrupts the flow. I'd recommend replacing it with "dead" (or "half-dead", since that often seems to be the case
This has been pointed out, but I'll point it out again. "Tis" is short for "it is", so your line would say, "It is you love them still", and wouldn't make any sense. I'd change it.
Ah, this line was really cute, and a nice departure from the "I love them still" thing. It may not make grammatical sense, but it sounds cute, dangit, and I love that as an end to the poem.
Well, I guess that last line I quoted wasn't the end. Was it? I'm not sure if this is the last line or sort of an author's note thing. If it's the last line, I think I prefer the other line over this one, but this is a cute author's note.
As for other random critiques, I felt like sometimes the repetition of "I love them still" was slightly too, well, repetitive. I sensed that you tried to mix it up with words like "yet" and "once again", but it didn't really do much. Maybe you can find a way to mix it up a little, and replace that phrase with things like the "forever you'll love them always" line. Also, I noticed that you said you were thinking of adding punctuation. I'd recommend adding it, because punctuation works well with this kind of poem.
Overall, this was really cute and relatable. The imagery was solid, and you created a loving picture of the weird, fluffy things that are cats. Thanks for sharing this, and keep up the great work!
Thank you for this review!!
It made me happy to know you're also a cat-lover! I liked how you said ..."you created a loving picture of the weird, fluffy things that are cats." That's so true, and creative. I'm glad you like it, and I know I'll make some changes to it. I'll edit it soon. Have a great day and happy writing!
Thank you again!
I COMPLETELY FELL IN LOVE WITH THIS POEM!
Definitely my cats! loved it, it was so cute! there should be more poems about cats ahah.
But i also agree with the use of more punctuation, but other than that. Awesome work!
Hi! I'm glad you loved this! (Btw, I don't swear, so I hope I'm not asking too much of you if you didn't use profane language in reviews, like mine?)
I'm going to have to edit this, and then I hop it will be all better. Have a great day and happy writing!
sorry, i completely understand. I will edit it out for you
I love this poem! Its so adorable! I think that like the previous reviewer stated, you should use some more punctuation. I also think that the use of "tis" in the sentence "tis you love them still" is incorrect. Great work!
Thank you for this review!!
I'm happy to receive it! I know, I didn't have any punctuation... still debating with myself on adding some or not. Happy writing!
Heya, Chrissy here for a review!
Me too. Prefer dogs, but cats are still cool. I'm not much good when it comes to poems, but I will do what I can.
I take it you like cats!
You need punctuation. There isn't any in there. That won't take so long to do, just a few minutes. Here let me show you...
It's up to you where you want the sentences to start and end. Everyone does it a little differently, so if you don't like the way I did it, toss it and start over.
I love this part! And the part about deceased rodents. Though, my cat prefers just to tear up birds and leave them lying on the sidewalk in little pieces.
Sorry for not being able to say much, but I've given you the best I could. I love your poem, and can't wait for more. Can you tag me when you put out your next work?
Keep writing!!!
Thank you for writing this review!! It made me happy especially since I'm a huge cat-lover (if you haven't guessed from my username
) and I love to write about my cats! Yes, I'll tag you when I put out my next work! Maybe it will be a poem about cats vs. dogs, and who is better!
AMAZING! My little kitties are the same. Royal, Spoiled, Annoying, But you love them still.
I think you could have added two more actions: Laying in the sun, and meowing at bugs/birds/rodents through the window. This was adorable and each sentence made me laugh and was relatable. Thank you for sharing.
-Waffle
Thank you for writing this review! (Btw, I love your username! So cute, except I don't eat pancakes or waffles.) I'll make sure to extend my poem, because my cats always have new things to do and say (besides "meow" and "hiss"). Your review made me happy!