Oblivion is where I want to go,
I need simply a black hole.
Eternally sleeping, yes I know,
Closing windows to my soul.
Dreaming of self harm,
Painting in my mind.
Razor along my arm -
I no longer shine...
I want to be alone,
I want to cause no pain
I'm sick of my life known.
There is no more gain.
I'm dead inside always...
I'm as real as fake smiles...
I'll fake it for days,
I'll pretend for miles.
I don't let them in;
I keep them in no light -
Though they hurt me and sin
I put up a fight.
Bullying and bickering
This reminds me:
A candle flickering -
Melting eventually.
I'm a rebel with causes,
I'm lost without a clue.
I don't see a pause
Don't know what to do...
I'd rather go die
In that black hole again -
If I can't cut, oh my -
I'd dream of it then.
So you understand me now?
Oblivion calls me there
Even if you ask, "But how?"
I hope you'll finally care.
I'm so sick of my life
I hate when the clocks chime
I'd rather die from strife,
Than smile one more time.
Because time's running out
A knife can do the trick
Rather than cry and pout,
Just think about it.
Oblivion is where
I want to go.
Free me of care
And let everyone know.
Oblivion calls me
From the depths of despair...
"I know you're hiding, Emily,
Come with us out of there."
I'm sorry to everyone
I'm sorry I want to die.
But if I find a gun,
Then I'll say goodbye.
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This is very deep and sad but still so beautiful!Thank you for sharing this.
I think your tittle is really catchy and your punctuation is totally fine.
I like the vibe of this work.Good job.I hope everything is okey, I wouldn't say anything about this work because it is brilliant and you are also amazing to write about it.
The rhyme is awesome and it gives me the good vibes of this work.It is going on smoothly while reading out loud or even in mind.Some words were with capital letter though it was not a start of new sentence but this is fixable.
Again good job!
Keep on writing with no fear.
This is rather sad! Ouch, my weak heart! It was very lyrical and was cleverly written- I applaud you for that. Being emotionally weak I easily could have cried- it makes me wonder if this is what is on my friend's mind right now. She's a bit too friendly with her scissors and sometimes I think she might one day do "it". I hated when people told me "it gets better", but it does. It took me two years, two (remarkably unintelligent) dogs and a gazillion better friends but things :are: better. I hope you see these "better days" and best wishes! Very well written and good luck!
Thank you for your comment! I appreciate the compliments, and I hope your friend gets better!
Hello, its me!
Sorry if this is a really short review.
This was powerful. I think when you are a writer the ability to write something so powerful is amazing. From this I can tell that you are an amazing writer. It is hard to find something like this on this website. This also had a very nice flow to it.
Overall this was a beautiful piece of work and I can't wait to read more from you in the near future. I am glad to have spent my time reading this.
goodbye, Have a nice day!
Thank you!
That was a nice thing to read when I got on today! I'll keep adding more. Happy writing to you
catlover211 the way you wrote this poem is reall.....WOW i dont really know how to expres it but if this is really about you or maybe someone u know than this is what i want to say...
dear emily,
is that really how you feel......... you know frankly speaking im scared of oblivion i mean so many people have been there right but no body knows whats its like...to explore oblivion it needs guts u really need to be brave to face it to explore the unknown..i know there are sometimes when death seems the easiest answer and yeah it is true that dying is easier than living but..... no matter what we should always keep going caz life is not a bed of roses....i really wish i could do somethimg to make it better.... but i really cant.
with all my love and then some more,
Thank you for your time for writing this! This is based off of me yes, currently, and sadly. I hope to spread the crucial message of this illness and improve others' lives as they struggle with this too. I'm sorry if you're scared of oblivion, I know I can be too. Happy writing!
I hope that you're doing okay
It's fine.. just a lot of stuff happens to my life, and kind of makes me crazy as heck. But I'll be okay in Heaven one day.