Hello, Epic here!
Sorry if this is too short but everyone has explained everything and I haven't read chapter one yet. I don't usually review chapters so it's kind of different for me.
Alright so the first thing I noticed was this chapter is long, not too long but long enough that I had to keep checking where this ended.
I love your characters, they are likeable and well described.
I love the opening line, I dragged me into this story and kept me reading! Good job on that! I don't see where the sci-fi comes into this but I'm guessing that in a few chapters you'll introduce the readers to some awesome new characters or aliens or just sci-fi stuff. Which is cool, I personally do enjoy sci-fi.
This chapter is actually really well written, that everyone has said more or less everything needed to be said. I really enjoyed reading this!
(sorry it's so short)
~~EPICnumber1~~
Points: 59
Reviews: 42
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