This Love

it is great.

This is beautiful; like, actually beautiful. I can almost feel the pain of it all. The repetition makes it all work too. It's lovely.

I found this poem captivating, you should take more advantage of those captivating qualities and add more descriptive words that would add just that much more emotion into the work. The poem was somewhat short but the repetition worked well however, i found the lines,"is hidden behind lies," and,"that is the only way," to make a noticeable change in the overall flow of the poem. less harmonious then the rest of the lines.

This poem really makes me think.. About how we reguard love.. I think that you did a very original way to show that. good job

This is an antithesis, it compares two differant ideas, to mean one over all thing in the end... I used "This Love" as a way to say something like "This Addiction" "this Problem" something like that... It is kinda confussing, but ya...

~Rain~

Hello! Book here. I really like this poem :3, i loved that you repeated "this love".
But i didn't get the "razor and pain" part. it just doesn't seem to fit to me. I could tell that this poem has a lot of emotion, which i like!

Well,that's all i have to say for now . Keep writing! and i hope this review helped you in some way (even though i suck at reviewing poems :p )

~Book Person~

MikaFreak123 wrote:I think I know what you are talking about here.
And I sincerely hope it's not about you.
I like the repeating of "This is my love"
But for some reason I can imagine you could add bit more emotional into this.
It is good though, no doubt. Just my opinion is all

I think I know what you are talking about here.
And I sincerely hope it's not about you.
I like the repeating of "This is my love"
But for some reason I can imagine you could add bit more emotional into this.
It is good though, no doubt. Just my opinion is all

SilentRain wrote:This is my love
for razors and pain
~~~
for cutting away