This is a really old poem, not sure if I should change it or not...
Rain drops
there falling
I can hear them
Oh, I wish I could see them
But I can’t
I’m trapped inside these white walls
with no way out
But I can hear the rain
Oh, I wish I could run in it
and be free once more
but I can’t
I can’t leave this room
There’s to much pain and sorrow
and I got tired of it all
so now I’m locked away
Longing for the rain
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it is a good poem i like it.
Every time I see a poem by "SilentRain" I open it. Haha! too bad I don't visit this forum much. Anyway, I can see only two typos which I highlighted pink. I really like your poems, SR; but this one honestly isn't that good.
I liked it. The only part I had a problem with was "I can't leave this room." I don't know why but I feel it kind of pulled away from the mystery of it. Thats just me though, and i'm kinda weird