What Is Truly Real?

by Rainn

Published July 4, 2012

In Poetry

I sit and I stare,
I look and I share.

Nothing is real,
All of it's fake.

The grass of green,
or the look of a snake.

It is all relative,
It's all very fake.

If you look and you ponder,
And you think and you wonder,
All thoughts are turned to the opposite veiw.

What if it's green?
Or what if it's blue?
How do I know,
That it's really you?

Is this spelled right?
Is it spelled wrong?

How do we know,
the Dictionary's not wrong?

Everything is misty,
Nothing is the same.

I don't know what to think,
I don't know what to say.

Everything I knew was real,
Everything I knew the same,
All of it turned out to be,
Nothing but a flame.

When I think about all things,
When truly I do,
Everything is hazy,
Even all of you.

For what is truly real?
What is truly sane?
I give these questions to you now,
So what do you have to say?
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WritingWolf
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WritingWolf wrote a review Review · Jul 4, 2012

I sit and I stare,
I look and I share.(share?)

Nothing is real,
All of it's fake.(this doesn't really rhyme)

The grass of green,
or the look of a wake.

It is all relative,
It's all very fake.(nothing to say here)

If you look and you ponder,
And you think and you wonder,
All thoughts are turned to the the(you wrought the two times) opposite veiw.

What if it's green?
Or what if it's blue?
How do I know,
That it's really you?(nothing here)

Is this spelled right?
Is it spelled wrong?

How do we know,
the Dictionary's not wrong?(nothing here)

Everything is misty,
Nothing is the(the "the" sounds out of place, but I don't know how you should change it.) same.

I don't know what to think,
I don't know what to say.(this is good)

Everything I knew was real,
Everything I knew the same,
Al of it('l)l turned out to be,
Nothing but a flame.

When I think about thing(s?) all things,
When truly I do,
Everything is hazy,
Even all of you.

For what is truly real?
What is truly sane?
I give these questions to you know,
So what do you have to say?(I like how you left it at a question.)

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Jenna12793
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Jenna12793 wrote a review Review · Jul 4, 2012

"When I think about thing all things"... That doesn't make sense :P
Also, "I give these questions to you know", was know supposed now?

Sorry, I'm just kind of picking up the few things that Toboldlygo missed, and I'm really not wanting to be mean.

But, I liked it. It reminds me of myself at times, but usually just when I start to get curious about everything. As I said though, I liked it :) You did great and I feel I can connect with it.

- Jenna

Rainn replied · Jul 4, 2012

Haha, sorry, sometimes I try to type to fast for my own good :P :)

Lol. It happens to the best :)

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Toboldlygo
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Toboldlygo wrote a review Review · Jul 4, 2012

"I don't know what to think, I don't know what to say," I really liked this, but I feel it needs a bit more.

"Al of itl turned out to be,
Nothing but a flame."

I think you meant to say, "All of it turned..." instead.

I really liked it otherwise, just that one typo to fix and maybe edit the other line to make it fit better. :)

Rainn replied · Jul 4, 2012

Oops :)
Thanks for pointin' that out!



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