Animosity.
Sesquipedalianists.
Pandemonium.
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Written by me and my father...Kinda joke :)
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I loved the little joke in this, it is clever once you really thing about it!
Oh yeah... hah, by the way, I am SecreteJournalist, but feel free to call me Brie! I am reviewing for the Green Lanterns, happy review day!!!!
I almost wish this was longer, but once you get the joke, you really learn to appreciate the shortness.
I would point out what the words meant, but the people before me have stolen that option!
But really, keep writing, I think this is clever and funny once you put your mind to it! Great job, keep writing, I will keep reading. Sorry for the short review!
~Sincerely
SecreteJournalist
AKA
Brie
This is really funny once you get to dissecting the word choice. I had no idea what sesquipedalianists was, so I started looking things up. I knew pedal was foot, but I had no idea what sesqui stood for. I had a feeling the tag at the end was kind of like pianists, and I was right about that. As a more exact translation,
sesqui-one and a half
pedal- foot
ianists-users.
The really interesting thing about that word choice is that one and a half feet, in poetry, would be three beats, and in making a haiku, you need to use two and a half, three and a half, and two and a half beats.
http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/sesquipedalian
Now, I'm typically pretty bad with senryu, or haiku because I've never really taken the time to read enough of them to understand what they're trying to do. If I'm correct, because of the humors nature, the structure, and the content being humans, this is a senryu. The juxtaposition between what is going on in the poem, that it is only three words, and the animosity is, in a way, connected with the noun really is what makes this funny. The only thing I can think to change this, would be the punctuation. Right now you end each line with a period and I believe instead, you should try to tie the three together with just a period at the end. It could give you more of a feel of animosity towards sesquipedalianists, causing pandemonium.
In seventh grade English please. I know what animosity and pandemonium mean but what the heck does Sesquipedalianist mean?
Sesquipedalianist: A person who tends to use sesquipedalian words.
Sesquipedalian: Characterized by long words; long-winded.
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I see that there is a bit of a joke to this haiku- which, just saying, I think it was great that you used this format. I don't think it would have worked as a piece otherwise. The jump from "feeling of ill will or enmity" to "wild uproar or disorder" worked very well. And I love how the center of the jump was sequipedalianists, or should I say, "those who are given to use long words". The usage of long words bridging animosity to sesquipedalianists to pandemonium was quite clever in my opinion. I love the playout you were using. Think it's very interesting and amusing, but I'm not sure many people will get it. It certainly prompted cachinnation from me, though. (Oh look, another long word!) Hope you write more poetry. Nice work.
A plus tard,
xxFleetingEternity