Hey you <3 Thank you for tagging me when you published this poem! I've been meaning to review this for awhile, and I'm finally getting to it now xD I'm just going to get straight into it!
I really, really love this poem. You've used some lovely water imagery throughout, and I love "the salt drops of emotion are precious jewels." I also love your well metaphor which I interpreted as the eyes that no longer carry any tears. And I think you ended the poem on the perfect note - a need to let go of life when it is over. And you last little part, "We will meet again at the end," provides hope and reassurance in the perhaps bittersweet ending. Overall, I most definitely enjoyed reading this lovely poem by you <3 I do have some suggestions, but these are personal opinions, so please disregard them if you don't agree! 
The first thing I'd like to mention is stanzas. Originally I was leaning on the side of separating your poem into stanzas, but now that I think about it, I kind of like how you have it. Because the lines are short and thin and they spiral down without a break, it resembles a tear to me. So I think that going either way works out perfectly fine! Just in case you wanted to add stanzas, I've added one way in the spoiler below that you could divide your poem. Now, there are multiple ways to divide your poem, and this is just one out of that many But again, I think your poem works perfectly fine without them!
The next thing I'd like to mention is punctuation. Sort of with the stanzas thing, I think I like this poem without the punctuation. It keeps the poem from stopping, and thus makes the poem flow and fall down like a tear. I do have two suggestions that are entirely my opinion, so please feel free to disregard
Life
I was thinking that a dash at the end of this would work nicely, just to kind of separate it from the next line (since the next line has its own subject)
We will
meet again
at the end
I also think a period at the very end of your poem would be cool to represent the ending or stopping of life. It would be like when the tear reaches the bottom/evaporates/or whatever a tear does when it falls from your eye xD But other than those two spots, I don't have any other suggestions!
I have two smaller things that I would like to point out -
1.) I noticed you used the word "gift" a few times throughout your poem
Tears
are a gift
The salt drops
of emotion
are precious jewels
a gift to us
Life
is a gift
Especially since this is a bit of a shorter piece, I think your poem would be more powerful without the repetition, and you could replace it with some stronger words. Or instead of finding synonyms for gift, you could try to incorporate more similes/metaphors in your poem! Just a thought
2.) This is a teeny suggestion that could perhaps make this a bit stronger
Some say it is
fragile
blown away at the
slightest gust
Some say it is
strong
for it lives in our
memories
Who is the "some" that you mention? Your parents? Your friends? Teachers or classmates or adults in your community? I think assigning a specific someone would make this poem more personal, and therefore more powerful. Maybe it could also bring more people to relate to this!
Overall, this is another lovely poem. You've been churning out some beautiful poems lately, and I always enjoy reading them. I think you did an amazing job with this one - I love the structure and language you've incorporated into this. It's gorgeous, and I look forward to reading more from you.
I hope this helped!
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