Escape

Hey mongoose here,

As always i love your work brolington!
This is really deep, enotion is ladened throughout abd soread like butter, its brilliant. Although it is quite an upsetting poem it holds alot of heart and meaningful statemnets which really grasp at your emotions. I lov how you use such powerful short lines to put across your point and the repetition if the bullet point style both at the top and bittim is really effective.
Thankyou for posting brolington!:)

I am blessed by your words;thank you.Lovely write up,pace and precision,clarity and sweet floW.Absolutely fantastic.Lets, take a look one more time:-
I have taken another brutal look and i saw,amazing beauty,outright metaphor,the last four lines are my favourites,and "This is your escape",crowned it all.Kuddos,the only advice i would give you is keep writing;keep writing wonderfully and always us precision where it is needed,just as you've done now.THANKS

While this is pretty depressing, I like how you captured the point of view of the people who cut and it gives an understanding in what their frame of mind is. I personally know people who do this and have heard the science of it and given this it was written well to get the feeling across. One thing that I would suggest is maybe add in how they feel about their lives at the beginning and maybe them looking at the blade then go forward. Of course I may just be getting the wrong impression of the piece and if so just leave a reply and let me know because that it completely possible, but if I am not, I think that my suggestions could elaborate it into having more feeling than just the bliss of cutting. i like it in that you use words like bliss, digresses and adores because it gives more feeling to the piece and I think that it was written well for it's purpose.

Methrirr here with your review.

MAIGAWD PAIGE. This is an amazing metaphor for what I think is drug abuse. I read it and wanted to keep reading it. I can find little that is wrong with this poem. I can here the voice of the narrator through this piece, even though it's written in second person. You have captured with this piece so many feelings, it's insane.

My favorite part about this poem is it's ending, it's last concluding stanza:

"You can’t Escape.
You don’t want to Escape.
This…
This is your Escape."

It twists with every word what it could mean, untill you capture the sense of mental dependence, which I can only compare to Frodo just before he was supposed to drop the ring into the fires of Mount Doom, and he turns around to face Sam like "No. The ring is mine." That's what that last stanza reminded me of.

10 out of 10, paige, which I've only given to ONE other person. This is a great poem.

I don't think there is anything about this poem that I didn't like/appreciate. Every element adds to the realism of what is going on in that instant, and you don't need to say it for us all to get it. All of it.

The description of the physical response is spot on: the racing heart, quickened breath, loss of focus. The imagery of that 'gorgeous red river,' and all it evokes -- life, gravity -- feeds into the theme of escapism. And your sentence structure! The use of parallelism (You Want it/ You Need it/ You Give in/ and You Want more/ You Need more/ You Get more) only heightens the immediacy of escape.
But above all, the bleakness of tone that seeps into the last three stanzas grounds me, the reader, back to the dark reality of what is going on.

I absolutely adore this. Thank you!

This is very powerful! Poetry is a good way of expressing yourself. This poem expresses something that people go through a lot. Emotional pain and physical pain battle with each other. So I understand this perfectly. I go through a lot of anxiety all the time. This poem is just amazing!!

This has an extreme emotional effect for me, because i spent 3 months of my life trying to get someone i loved to stop doing this. I failed in the end, and was violently forced to move on when they threw me out of their life. Over time i began to understand their need to constantly do this to themselves, no matter how much it hurt those around them. This is scary accurate for me, it really is. This poem is emotionally charged, emotionally accurate, and one hundred percent Pathos and Imagery. The descriptions leave very little to the imagination, and the poem itself truly touches on what the mind says and does, in contrast to what the body does. Physical pain to eliminate emotional pain, and this poem describes it perfectly. I know of no other way to describe this other than an emotional roller-coaster, with a profound effect on anyone who has been anywhere near something of the same context. Besides my already existing limited understanding, this poem has really allowed me a deeper view into what some of the people around me go through every day, and no matter how much i try to help them stop, it's truly an addiction, is it not?

also, i found a spelling error for you:

You breathe fast and loose focus.
You Want it.
You Need it.
You Give in.

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