september sky overhead
my skylight daydreams
drift away
on the string
of a single green balloon
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This poem is kind of short but you could expand it with ideas and it will be a great longer poem. Trust me, it will be a great poem.
Keep on writing,
Kikialicia31
Hello!
I think lots of short poems (including published ones) are hard to relate to because of their length. But in this poem, the reader gets a solid image that creates feeling and there's something happening, too. So, that's about all I have to say. But if you want, this poem could be expanded with the ideas you have here because that would make a great longer poem.
Good job and keep writing!