Oblong Houses

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bumped so you might get another review

On the swings kicking
higher and higher, gazelle legs
running into the sun and surf

This image is fantastic. The lines' rhythm swings you up and suspends you with "gazelle legs" and you get that free movement in the horizon that's so beautiful and evocative.

fast enough to fly
almost, she thinks—

I think there needs to be a pause before "almost" because your pace/rhythm needs to slow down, be more thoughtful. With no pause after fly it all kind of rolls out and gives the impression of panic. Love that you use an m dash though, people seem to not appreciate its difference.

or wandering the streets
of a too-small town,
claustrophobic
oblong houses closing in like
a winter's night

Here I find the use of "claustrophobic" as redundant, it's already expressed through the too-small town, and the fact that they're closing in, so there's no reason to explicitly tell the reader how you feel. Once again I'm not grasping the analogy of a winter's night. Interesting, but perhaps not effective in a poem of such brevity.

and a lake hitting the shore
like an ocean

You sneak this in here and it feels underdeveloped, like a passing thought that got tacked on. I would suggest cutting it and working the last two lines together, or developing that stanza further.

Overall the only thing that could have been improved is your cohesiveness. It's not "the same" as what? It's easy to see this poem as disparate, since your last line fails to meaningfully tie it together. On the plus side this was well written, with the grammatical polish that always lures me in. Your tone was smooth and the imagery from the first stanza, at least, has a lasting impact.

EDIT: Your changes are a good start, I'm giving you a like just for the fact that you're trying to improve. Don't use double n dashes though! "––" use this: —