Me.

This is amazing!!..... I think the way you titled it "Me" was really cool. You are a great writer... i like reading it. i love the way you wrote it about the truth on you. That's how it should be.. I say that if you cant love your self then how can any one else love you. And if this is as true as it seems then great job on being honest to your self.With people who can write the truth this world isnt as bad as i took it to be...

Hi!

To start, I love your poem! It almost reminds me of a book I read when I was younger. It has a nice playful confidence that flows very well.

In your first stanza instead of " hear" you probably meant " here" , but that was most likely a simple mistake; nothing major. Your opening stanza was set very well giving me a nice idea of what the overall poem would be like.

The second and third stanzas really gave me a great visual of a nature girl; someone who is always exploring and not the typical girly girl. (By these stanzas you could tell it's about a girl.)

Your fourth, fifth, and sixth stanzas were also very well connected to your main idea enforcing a fantastic visual.

I read the seventh stanza a few times over, and I got a very sassy feel when you said " Do I have to be like you? Or can I actually think?" With those lines you put into perspective for me that this person is pretty smart and wants to be unique. I really liked the style you used for this stanza.

The eighth stanza was also nice giving off an artsy feel and creative side to your character.

Finally, the last stanza! Beautifully ended by " Of why I was made me" , your last stanza did a great job up wrapping up the poem and finalizing the idea.

Your poem was something I could really relate to! It was nicely put and outstanding! I hope you keep writing, your style is something you should continue to share!

I enjoyed this poem to quite a great extant. It read very well, and nothing really stood out that was bad. There was one change which I thought would better the reading, however. In the third stanza you write:

"My makeup is the mud,
The water, earth and sky."

This may be myself simply saying what my personal writing habits are as a poet, but in my opinion the word "The" didn't need to be capitalized in the context of the poem. Punctuation is a powerful thing, and here in this poem it gave me a sense that the mud has a different feeling - a different level of importance than the rest of the subject matter that's in the stanza. This may have been what you were trying to convey of course, but in my opinion it reads better with the word "the" simply being all lowercase. Other than that, there were not any other problems with the poem.

This was a great poem, and you should continue writing!

My smile isn't pretty
My teeth are crooked, too.
My hair is all a mess,
So what?
I'm not hear to please you.(tis good)

I don't wear any makeup,(I cant get that to rhyme in my head, but it's probably just me.)
Or hairspray in my hair.

My makeup is the mud,
The water, earth and sky.

My domain, it is the wild.
Of forest, hill and sea.(I like this one)

I swim in flowing river beds,
and play within the sea.(this is good)

I like to camp and ride my bike.
Oh, and like to go for hikes.(love how it rhymes!)

Even though I am a girl,
Why must I like pink?
Do I have to be like you,
Or can I actually think?(yes we CAN think! )

I like drawing, reading, painting,
Finding caves and going skating.
Water skeeing(it's spelled with two I's not E's), flying kites,
playing tag deep in the night.

I'm not afraid to get down dirty,
To be my soulful me.
To play hard and be joyful,
Of why I was made me. (like this stanza)

All in all I love it!!!!