This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review!
Sorry that I haven't tackled Melt in a little while, but I'm here now to review this chapter part, and hopefully the next as well. We're introduced with this new character, Gideon, and from the other review I soon figured out that this isn't in chronological order, as well as the context clues left in the chapter. I actually don't mind that this chapter is a flashback all that much, but it does feel a little out of place here and kind of disrupts the flow of the rest of the story.
I'm thinking that this could be a prequel, or at least something placed more smoothly into the story. We see that in this chapter it's kind of the origin story of Lilli, or at least, we meet her before she meets Cate, and I hope we kind of get to see more of Cate's character alone as well. The character of Gideon felt a little bit awkward to me and I wasn't really a fan of him, but I'm pretty sure we won't see him in anywhere else in the book since he doesn't seem to have the role of an important character. In this chapter, we also find out, or at least, we kind of learn that Cate is only 35 and she would have been 19 when she had Lilli, which is something that's interesting.
This far into the novel, I think this had to the weakest chapter just because the others are so strong and while this could be the opening to your novel in a second or third draft, I think it should stay where it is for now. I suggest playing around with the order for this because I can see this being the first chapter but I also have the thought or idea that I already like the first chapter quite a bit as it is. I didn't dislike the chapter, but I kind of missed the feel or tone that filled the rest of the novel with Cate being in it, but obviously Cate can't be in this chapter.
I hope I helped and have a great day! If you have any questions, feel free to ask! <3
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