Hey! IamTraunt here to review!
I love the use of your vocabulary. Its incredible.
Antagonism - active hostility or opposition.
Egomania - Egomania also known as an obsessive preoccupation with one's self and applies to someone who follows their own ungoverned impulses.
Howitzers - a short gun for firing shells on high trajectories at low velocities.
Sorry, I had to do that just to classify the meaning.
So, obviously you are using the theme of life and death, its quite an open subject. Its very interesting and can cover so many topics, and you did that really well. Your use of vocabulary also had a nice and useful meaning to it, each of your words were needed.
One of your most powerful lines are the first two in Stanza 1:
Blood everywhere, another life gone.
Blood everywhere, another one born.
This is very, very powerful and yet very true. Murder equals blood (usually). Birth equals blood, most definitely. The first line is supposed to be the most important, which they were. Ot grabs the readers attention. Which again you did.
I liked reading this. It was incredibly enjoyable.
Good job!
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