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Hey there VegasLights!!
This is Eros here with a review for you !!
A really meaningful piece of poetry, "Thick, Black lungs". You wrote it in a beautiful way... The poem flows very well and the theme of the poem is very realistic.
Smoking is injurious to health, the same statement is expressed in such a beautiful mannner.
The first sentence has a sarcastic touch to it... Many a times, sarcasm works when love fails. I have personally experienced this.
Overall it was a poem that tries to change people's mind and make them think again before touching another cigarette. These things acts like poison and they are slow death. Everything is explained very nicely.
It was an amazing piece of poetry...
Keep writing such awesome stuff and we would love to keep reading them !
Have a great day/ night !
~Eros.
This is absolutely beautiful. This should be postered all over the internet, it's amazing. It's emotional, it's deep, basically describes the truth and more people should know about your talent.
Aww, thank you!!
Hello, E.E here for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.
So, the first thing that I noticed when I was reading the poem was that, well, nothing! It was perfect, from what I could see and read. And my favorite line, which I amgiving you you have no say in it, would have to be "Its in your veins, but the poison reaches your brain." I love this line. It reads so well and it-it just screams I AM THE BEST LINE TO THIS READER PAY ATTENTION LOOK!! I dunno, I just love the line.
Overall, I liked the poem and keep up the good work! So, happy Valentines Day ! I really need to go now, Grim has souls to reap and he needs more cocoa. He has a problem, seriously. Annnd I think he brought a dinosaur to life. Great. Anyways, Cheerio and fruit loops to you!
Thank you for making this poem, it truly speaks to my heart. I agree that people should stop smoking and I hope this poem reaches the eyes of many. The complexity and simplicity of this poem are interwoven so greatly and deeply that even the deepest thoughts of my mind, about this subject, are brought out so easily through your poem. The effects of not smoking while trying to quit can cause diseases that are incurable compared the effects of smoking yet to me seeing the world stop smoking would be a blessing. I hope this review was at least good to you as it was to me. I really thank you for writing this poem from the bottom of my heart.
Thanks for sharing this poem about the dangers of tobacco smoke. You get the message across very clearly. One moment the person is healthy and the next he is suffering from many possible illnesses such as asthma, emphysema, and even lung cancer. I once read about a guy who developed throat cancer from smoking, they had to remove his jaw and he would still smoke by making a small aperture in the bandages and inhaling the smoke through there. Makes you wonder about human intelligence doesn't it? All I got from it is asthma. Could have been worse.
Deep, I agree don’t smoke peeps