I love you, mom

Legacy here for review.

I like the simplicity of this poem, but it seems emotionless. I would like to see some examples of how you showed her love or vise versa.

Some of your stanzas were repetitive, so I would fix that honestly.

It looks like you were trying to have regular punctuation, but it isn't perfect. You have commas where there doesn't need to be one in multiple places. You also have a drug out sentence but you put a period in the inappropriate part of the sentence.

Overall, I would still call this a draft and take it back to the publishing center. I would like to do another review once you edit. Legacy.

This is a very plane poem and it feels very nonpersonnel and withdrawn. I'm the type of person who thinks that the best way to make an impression on your reader is to put in personal and touching stuff that you did with your mother. Like the way she took care of you when you're sick or anything that she did, that was special that no one else did for you. The only thing that was personal in the poem was saying that she was there for you when your dad was not.

Hi. This is kman134. i'm here to review your work.

I love my mother. She brought me into this world and gave me a lot of love. I can rely on her for anything and she will always have me helping her out.

this poem is the perfect mother's day poem. it is filled with a lot of love and affection for one's mother in every stanza. the emotional tone and the symbolisms are very pleasing to the eyes. the poem flows really well with all this romance and spirituality with the wording.

Although certain stanzas like the second and third seem a bit repetitive, it was still appreciative. i would proofread it and make a few changes. however, if you are okay with the way it's written, then you can keep it the way it is.

Anyways, this is a pretty good poem. It is a very appropriate gift for any mother since it came from the heart. i hope you write more like this.

Hi VegasLights! I loved your poem, it was so touching and heartwarming. I can relate to it so well.

I have almost no suggestions for this review, but here's one. I know it's not a big deal, but I've always been picky about capitalisation. There's one other thing that's bothering me, although it's not that much of a problem. In your second stanza, the last two lines end with me. It makes that certain part sound a little repetitive. I would change it to...maybe, something like, "You take care of me, and that is all I (really?) need." yeah. I think that's it! I really liked your poem and I look forward to reading more of your work!

I hope my review helps!

Heeey there, VegasLights! With3r3dros3 here for a review.

I've reviewed A LOT of your works and I'm pretty sure all of them are poems about romance or something else. I have never actually read or reviewed any Mother's Day work, so this is my first time. So excited to review yours!

Okay let's cut to the chase, I do love the flow of this poem. I do think every stanza flows together nicely because you state something like getting mad at your mom, then you back it up like saying you two are family.

The structure is good, it doesn't need to change.

Now let's get onto EMOTION. I really did feel the emotion in your poem, especially at the end of your poem. It really touched me.

As far as that goes, I do love this poem so much. I think you're a very talented young writer and I can't wait to see what else you publish in the future.

Until then, keep writing and best of luck!!

xo. With3r3dros3