Hey Steam!
I loved aesthetically the font you used for this poem. Much of what I said in my previous review is also going to apply to this poem, there is a lot of telling and not much to interact with.
I am not a fan of "I remember..." as repeated refrains, it is done often in many poems and it can get superflous. Once you say it once, we get the point. Say it once, say ir right.
I feel like the crux of the poem for me was the "But something changed" line. It adds tension and conflict and makes for a nice turn. However, "something" os boring, general and vague. Specifically, an event occured. What was it?
I hope this helps!
Keep writing.
~ as always, Audy
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