Hey! Anne here with a review!
Your poem was very enjoyable, I loved how you expressed each of the stanzas.
1st stanza
This stanza in particular, I felt was talking about the failure of our senses rather than failure of effort. With the eyesight we have, it's practically impossible to see microorganisms. With bare eyes. But we still have microscopes and can see them?! Or maybe it's just talking about our own senses.
2nd stanza
This is absolutely true. Amid the busy world, we've stopped listening to nature's voices. It's pathetic but true! Ha! Humans have forgotten the peace that can be gained just hearing the leaves rustle.
3rd stanza
We can sometimes, understand our pets, no? Anyway, the stanza was a good one. However, I didn't quite like the repetition of 'stopped listening'. Even though, it was written differently in 2nd and 3rd stanza, it was still meant for the ears. Rather, I'd suggest something like this.
We are much closer to other animals.
We are even of the same Kingdom.
But why can't we find any similarities
Maybe we have just
Stop seeing.
4th stanza
Woah! This stanza was the bestest!! I hadn't known the poem was heading here. It's really well written. and so relatable. The meaning was so deep and heartwarming.
I absolutely loved the poem!! Keep writing...
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