Hi Phillauthet! Hope you are having a good day/night/afternoon/evening/morning. @hannah0528 here with a quick, hopefully helpful review. I hope you like it!
Grows:
"Grooming them is a joy.
Brushing the smooth coat,
and that hair... Oh boy!
It's a wonder they don't gloat!"
The first three lines are perfect! Great job! I did think that the last line was unfitting, though. I think the first three had so many syllables that that line seemed like it would go in the next stanza, and because of that how it would have rhymed with the second line didn't work out. Maybe just try to shorten it a little?
Glows:
YES YES YES. In my 5 months on YWS I have never seen a poem about horses and finally, finally I stumbled on this one! I love it! I have ridden a horse once, at a lesson for a birthday present and it was an unforgettable experience, one that I thought couldn't be put into words. Until I read this. Great job!
I hope this review was helpful! Keep writing and have a great day! I hope to hear more from you!
Sincerely,
@hannah0528
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