Hey, Lele here for a review
Just wanted to start by saying this was a fun poem to read. Quirky and funny. It feels like a story book narrator were reading it out loud.
It challenges the reader of their understanding of curiosity itself. Very nice.
The way you worded the thought process before/after actively googling and then expressing your thoughts of what you found was nice. Very relatable when learning new things and questioning the worlds perspectives
For the second stanza, I think it would flow better if you matched the syllables in each line.
So instead of:
“I wanted to know the story behind;
the roots of this statement,
so I looked it up in Google, and new
perspective it lent.”
It would read:
“I wanted to know the story
Behind the roots of this statement
So I looked it up on google
And new perspective it lent”
The word “lent” feels oddly placed because it’s one syllable off. But for the sake of rhyming I see why you used it. At the sacrifice of spelling rhyming, I’d suggest
“and new perspective it came with”
The last stanza is my favorite, it sums it all together at the end. The final line is powerful. “Explore in enormity”. Very good word play and inspirational to anyone confined to a single way of seeing things when learning or excelling.
Overall, it’s a great piece. Keep up the writing.
Points: 349
Reviews: 20
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