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o babekins the third
what have thy done
i am lonely as syrup
as unused as a wasted condom
u brok mi harte
u destroyed my noble arches
and now you will pay
FOR ALL YOU HAVE DONE
dundundundundun
got 13k in da bank
swallow dem apples up your crack
spinoza spaghetti
rob a bank like i robbed my sister's hoohoo
giselle gazelle fafillion yen miss ale
cauliflower hour in texan flavours
saviour from stupid behaviour
RODO
ROLO
YOU
SHALL NOT
PASS
WIND
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Thanks for writing this very colorfully amusing poem. I like the way it mixes archaic English with modern. That sets the mood for the humor. Then the shift to Irish brogue further enhances the
comical aspect. The irrational, seemingly unprovoked insults added to the hilarity. Then, as if that wasn't enough, you to top it off by going into pure nonsense-verse.
I salute you for your bravery in posting this work of humorous are. I have many but hesitate because they re usually not viewed in a very kindly fashion. The more serious ones which delve on the deeper, darker things of life such, as unhappiness with all its subtle, bitter nuances, seem far more popular. This one I will include in my archives.
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I paused when I came to the "....my sister's hoohooo"part because it seems to be a reference to incest. I would write it as "....my sister's! Hoohoo!" to avoid it being misunderstood. Or place the "HooHooo!" on the next line.
Hello there! Londone here to review your work.
This certainly made me giggle. You have an interesting way with words. If this was a new style of writing poetry and you enjoy it, go ahead and persue it. May I just warn you that others may find it difficult to understand.
Of course, I freaked out over the spelling errors and grammar, but that’s me. I’m a jerk. You seem to have succeeded if your goal was to make me laugh, though. Well done, I’m a buttoned-up person for the most part.
This was enjoyable and it amused me. Keep up the funny work.
Londone
I don't have much time nor do I have much to say, so I'll make this quick.
Well, this was an interesting little poem here. I'm going to assume that this poem was written for fun and was not meant to be taken seriously. If it was, I apologize.
Keep in mind I'm no expert on poems or comedy.
I must say though, for what I assume is a sort of joke poem, the poem actually flows better than a lot of other serious poems I've read. It doesn't make a whole lot of sense, but then again, I suppose it doesn't need to, considering it was written for fun.
I admit it did make me chuckle a little bit. I don't know if it was the seemingly randomly chosen words or the purposeful misspellings that did it for me. If it was your intention to amuse people, you have succeeded.