Hello!
Stegosaurus here for a review!
As you posted this as lyrics, I can see the theme and the feeling of this. Another thing, I am sure most people can relate to this as most songs do that. They have the feeling of people agreeing and nodding their head. However, I feel like the repeating on the same lyrics doesn't exactly move the point across. It is like shoving snow on something then smoothing it out then adding more snow etc.
Try adding some feeling in the middle (like the chorus) because all it seems, this seems to be the backdrop of songs.
Another thing, is the spacing. However, you can leave it the way you must. Completely up to you since you are the poet/writer of this.
Overall, this was a good piece of lyrics and hopefully get to read more of your work!
If you like me to go over anything, let me know!
Steggy
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