Hello.
As I have come to this work most recently, compared with your other efforts I find this one to be more poetic.
It almost doesn't fit with the tone I had found you'd already established - and I'm beginning to think that this has all been constructed deliberately. The setting out of verses and the chorus in this one is very much like a regular stanza construction in a poem and it works. There is definite regularity here, with less emphasis on rhyme and more on the questions that the narrator is asking of themselves, the characters within the narrative you've effectively established and of the person reading this.
I think there is a sad tone overhanging your work and that the void left at the end of this work suggests that there is perhaps more darkness to come...
Points: 100
Reviews: 16
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