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A Grimace or Two

by KingQueenKnave


Let’s exchange a glance

Some wine for your nerves

Stumbled upon by chance

You’re acting so reversed

A bloody nose for good times

The way it ought to be

Read between opaque lines

Stop being so reserved


Revered by the many

And rejected by the few

Perhaps it’d be best to

Give a grimace or two

Revered by the many

And rejected by the few

Perhaps it’d be best to

Give a grimace or two


Let’s exchange a glance

Some wine to calm you down

You’re assured by the chance

That we’ll make no sound

A runny nose for old time’s sake

Surrender to temptation

Not for those who are fake

Hearing too many sounds


Revered by the many

And rejected by the few

Perhaps it’d be best to

Give a grimace or two

Revered by the many

And rejected by the few

Perhaps it’d be best to

Give a grimace or two


The best is yet to come

The rest is yet to move on

The best is yet to come

The rest is yet to move on


Let’s exchange a glance

Some wine to calm you down

You’re assured by the chance

That we’ll make no sound

A runny nose for old time’s sake

Surrender to temptation

Not for those who are fake

Hearing too many sounds

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Sun Oct 18, 2015 1:44 pm
Gristlecharm wrote a review...



Hello.
I think there is some real hidden romance hidden behind the words in this song.
It's like the person narrating it has such an eye for detail when describing the other person that it's kinda sweet. On the other hand, you may have been aiming for a creepy tone when writing it. As if the other person has been studying their lover so intently that it's become like an obsession.
I like the fact that I can't really decide on my interpretation of this and your knack for keeping the reader/listener guessing is really clever. Keep writing!




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Thu Oct 15, 2015 12:25 am
Winter257 wrote a review...



Hello there! Gonna leave you a quick review.

So, I really liked these lyrics! I was imagining this as a rap in my head xD
I loved how you worded it, too. The flow was consistent throughout, and I didn't find any of the wording awkward, which is definitely an accomplishment. I originally assumed this was a poem, so I had to edit this review a bit XD either way, it was wonderfully written, and I can't wait to read more of your work! You're very talented! :)




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Sat Oct 10, 2015 7:12 am
tintomara138 wrote a review...



Wow, these are the lyrics? I wonder how this sounds as a song. I read it as a poem but I really can picture it as a song, I just don't know which genre it belongs to. I really like it, especially the parts about the wine and the nose. Is there a possibility that we'll be able to hear it in the future? I would definitely put it on my playlist.

Keep on writing!





The simple truth is that authors like making people squirm. If this weren't the case, all novels would be filled completely with cute bunnies having birthday parties.
— Brandon Sanderson, Alcatraz Versus the Evil Librarians