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Oh My Word

by Holysocks


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Bad word. O>O


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Hey Tuesday here for a (short) review.

I don't usually review essays but this seemed to have caught my eye because it could relate to anyone who reads it. I enjoyed the point you are trying to make as the essay continues because everyone is different and can do what they can do. Also the wording of this essay is muy bein, so kudos for you for that plus the argument you provided could be used for many people, such as writers being so called weird by their human nature as writers.

My favorite line, throughout this whole thing and made me smile, would be Now, I'm not saying that you should give serial killers a second chance, be reasonable. I don't know why but this made me laugh because even though you might judge people, you must always be reasonable to the person you talk to because if you start to talking to someone they could easily be a murderer or something.

Anyway, this wasn't much of a review as I would have hoped for. I liked it and hope to review more work from you.

Farewell,
Tuesday




Holysocks says...


Thanks, Tues!



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Wow, it's super, my friend! I can't tell how much i enjoyed reading this. you have said the correct thing that we all should know. And, you don't need to worry about what others gonna think. You have written what you think and it's not wrong.

"We're afraid to speak our minds, because there's too many opinions." I agree with it and no wonder you were worried about your writing. recently, this thing's worrying me too much (gotta get outta this)

I don't know what to say more, i'm just thinking about what to say, sorry for this incomplete fat comment, I am just so thinking right now.

~Beg your pardon~

~Min




Holysocks says...


Thanks! :-P



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^^



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You did an absolutely marvelous job with your wording. Not only did you leave little room for argument you expressed yourself like a true writer. You my friend did an excellent job with this and for that I applaud you.




Holysocks says...


Thank you for your kind words! :P



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Hi, Holysocks, this is Curiosity (killed the) Cat here to review!

First your title caught my interest. "Because I Can". It's all cool and mysterious. What kept my attention was your brilliant use of language. Amazing writing, my friend. You have the gift. But most importantly, I feel like this essay is so true. I mean, when has the pressure of life been more in-your-face? I always feel like my work is being judged and criticized and hated on in real life, which is partly why I joined YWS to write anonymously.

Anyway, I have a few things to say about the phrasing. I'm going to just rewrite a few paragraphs, and I'll try not to bore you to death with my ridiculously long review. XD
"Let's face it; we're all messed up to a certain point. There's always something you think you are bad at, or you regret doing, or you wish you weren't like. There's so many little tiny differences that people have. I hate to break it to you, but we just don't all think the same." (I love the point you're making here, but I feel like the flow is a bit off, that's all. :) )
"Writers, like everyone else, are different. We're weird. So we may believe in things that someone else might think is crazy, or wrong, or whatever... I think the reason there's such a vastness of odd people in the writer world, is because writers aren't afraid to be the odd ball." (Some of the phrasing is a bit awkward... No biggie.)

"For the first time in centuries, writers are not writing honestly. They're not living honestly. They're afraid to speak our minds..." (Here you use we're once and they're twice. Either change both to "we're" or "they're".)

Anyway, that's all I could really find wrong with this. Great job making your point! :D This was a brilliant read.
~Cat




Holysocks says...


Well thank you! I totally understand the awkward sentences ( I do that a lot ). I'll get on that right away!!



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*claps* wait no, *applauds*
Thank you for taking the words straight out of my mouth -or mind. I live in the UK, and there are some pretty horrific things that are being spread around on media at the moment (if you want to know, just type UKIP into your search engine) And all of it has made me mad, and think exactly what you have just wrote.
I would usually write a bit on their grammar and spelling, but you have none that I can comment on; it is perfect.
Thanks again, it really made my day,
Random Columns




Holysocks says...


Thank you! I'm glad it made your day!!!




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