This story is described in great detail, and is nice, but...
This story is worded very strangely. It seems to have strange wording to appear intelligent (no offense at all, sorry). For example:
To say the truth, I was super infatuated with the invisible man to such an extent that no one being would ever look at me the same again.
You can reword that to say, "To be honest, I was so infatuated with that invisible man to such an extent that no being would ever look at me the same way again." to make it simpler, but still with a hint of eloquence.
It also hops to a new idea very quickly. In the beginning, it was talking about a wood that, when at night, it would appear to "sing" a morning together for the next days.
Then it suddenly starts talking about pachysandra being ignored for some reason, then it starts talking about some infatuation with an invisible man (as talked about above). Then it goes on about things disappearing a strange rate. Oh, and some guys haircut.
Now, for some reason, every tree in the world is going to fall down? What does that have to do with disappearances and pachysandra? There was no build up, no suspense for a shocking realization. Just some bomb thrown at the end of the story.
Am I supposed to be a Harry Potter fan to understand this? I looked up the word Nargles, and I got a Harry Potter reference, so sorry if I just don't get it. T__T
Is this supposed to have just random sentences thrown out? If so, excellent piece. Maybe I'm weird, sorry. I always read and watch completely organized stories and anime, respectively. "Letters Have Letters"... maybe that means something. My brain is confused.
Well, there's my review. @.@
Points: 428
Reviews: 14
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