Dear Holysocks,
I don't have a lot of thought about this poem since my head is kind of all over the place right now, though I do want to say that I really enjoyed the metaphors you added in, especially the last paragraph. "though tears are lava / pouring over my eyelids / they won't kill me." Though now that I read it, it is a little strange that the tears are pouring over her EYELIDS. Either way, this is an interesting poem, that sounds very nice, and I liked that you make all of it lowercase. It seemed to give it a bit of an atmosphere that worked really well with the content.
Beautiful poem! Sounds very nice. Have a good day/night!!!
Sincerely, Bailey Matwiiw.
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