I enjoyed reading this poem and the imagery it evoked. A candle in a casket is burning on borrowed time, is it not? There really is no rhyme or rhythm to critique in this poem, and to me it shines through on the strength of its voice, the quiet assertion of 'I am'.
But I do agree that as powerful as those three quoted words are, they could be structured even more effectively.
Thank you
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