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fluttering birds chirp cheerfully
as the wind blows in from the east
but as i am cowering in my cave
i am unsure, to say the least
~~~
stop, i tell you, danger is imminent
acid rain, hail, and sleet
there could be a meteor strike today
or maybe some athlete's feet
~~~
don't you have education?
don't you know the threat?
don't you realize the danger of staying
outside, with no upset?
~~~
today, there is a forecast
of a large chance of death
of disease, of hunger, of thirst
or chronic loss of breath
~~~
or maybe we get incinerated
by a forest fire
or maybe we're icarus
and we fall after flying higher
~~~
you see, my friends, we are all in danger
even if you wont believe
with a high chance of noxious gas
i hope you have a trick up your sleeve
~~~
so tonight i am staying in my cave
my safe, safe home
because the chance of disease transmission
is lowered when i'm alone
~~~
now you can all live your dangerous lives
chasing a rabbit or hare
and now i'm sleeping with no remorse
i hope there isn't any fun out there
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What a poem! I couldn't stop myself from reading the poem although I had several tasks to do. Whatever, yoy did a very good job. You described all the dangers of this age in such a way.
I enjoyed reading your piece. Keep writing
thank you for the review!
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Hahahaha
I love everything I’ve read from you. It’s good to have an active comedian on site.
Have you read Shel Silverstein's poems? This reminds me of them.
The only critique is that the rhythm doesn’t flow nicely.
It’s okay man, you can come out of your cave every once in a while. Bring a mask and some hand sanitizer and maybe even a milo Murphy type backpack, but it’s alright out here.
Unless of course if you just got hit by a massive snowstorm, in which case, you’d better stay home.
I'm honored that you can compare my work with Shel Silverstein!
Haha yeah this poem was more of a satire than a humorous poem, but it could be interpreted as humor.
Thanks for the review!