Author's note: Poem inspired by "Winner Takes it All"
The game begins, slow and tense,
Quickly burning, losing sense,
Knight to B3, Pawn to E5,
I poked a nest, an angry hive,
Forlorn wishes, staggering love,
My head's stuck in a Pirate's cove,
Castle-- Kingside, Queen pins Rook,
I can barely speak to you, nor even look,
Desperately, I try to Rook Skewer,
But you see through it and I'm one rook fewer.
Rook to H6, Knight to G4,
Our past together is merely a lore.
Pawns murdered, Bishops maimed,
Knights are killed and Rooks are claimed,
All I have left is a king and few others,
Our bond is broken, we were never lovers,
Finally, I try my final play,
My king blocks the G8,
But your pawn moves up and checks my king,
We had not history, had no thing,
Saddened, I refuse to lose,
I will not resign, I will not choose,
But your queen moves almost the same,
And for a brief moment, I don't feel a frame . . .
Checkmate-- You win the game.
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WOW, THIS IS AN AMAZING POEM! I have never read a poem like this before. I loved you you made it into a game of chess. Your rhyming was great and I loved the flow of the poem. Though, I think you had a typo in this line. "We had not history, had no thing," I think you meant to say, We had no history, had no thing. Besides that the poem was downright perfect. I loved every second of it to the point that I could not look away from it until I finished reading it.
Amazing job! Can't wait to read what you write next!
Carpe diem,
LUNARGIRL
I really loved this poem. the rhythm was beautiful. I love how unique this poem is.
Thanks!
This is amazing, the rhythm was just *perfecto*
Thank you for your comment on how my poem was *perfecto*. Much appreciated!
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Wow good job! I really, really, really LOVE IT! This is so unique! I don’t think I hav ever read any kind of poem written in this way before. Like I said, it’s so uniques and one of a kind. I love how many different references and how ,any different ways you are able to express what you are saying. It may seem like you are writing about a simple chess math or game, but you are able to turn it into something that is actually really interesting and fun to read! I loved reading it because it’s just so good and so special. I love how you make it a story. You are narrating it, but I also feel like all of the chess pieces are individual characters.
I love the line
Our bond is broken, we were never lovers
This is AMAZING! Keep up the wonderful and fantastic work! Merry Christmas 🎄
Ailah
Thanks for the review!
If you play chess this would probably make a little more sense
If you don't know what Rook Skewers or Pins are then you can search them up
Woah! I'm speechless after reading this!!
Seriously don't have anything to say!!
Keep up the great work
Thanks!