With what tools do I write my death in such a way that I appear to be okay? A knife is too risky, a rope is too brutal, and a rooftop is too scary. A pen, though, a pen is the perfect way to end the suffering. Pen is my method, paper is my body. I just need to write it out. Write the blood from my veins, the tears from my eyes, the thoughts from my brain. Yes, a pen does me justice. A pen is all it takes to show myself that they were wrong. Write about your talents, write about your friends, write about your heart. Write about everything they said you never had. Every word is a new person left in awe, every line can win awards, every stanza can change the world.
With whose permission do you write in the middle of the night? You don't need to ask permission for a sweet release, just let your feelings turn into miles of revenge, of love, of justice, of hate, of chicken scratch and tears. Write miles, days. Every mile, a memory; every day, a nightmare. Change your nightmares and write them into fantasies and beauty. Let your thoughts flow from your head to paper, your savior. Let your thoughts flow from your heart to pen, your fuel. Let your thoughts flow from the pen, your method, to the paper, your body.
With what fire do you burn another page of silent pain that I've written to keep myself sane? It's the very fire that I've used to free my warriors dressed in red to fight for me on life's battlefield. If you're trying to end my suffering, you should know that fire has never worked for me. The only way to end it all is to use that pen. It's the only method. The paper is my body. Write your fears, write your fire. Write it all. Just write.
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Hello there. And you know I will try to give a fair review.
This poem, like your other ones, is flawless. I can't say anything much to help you make it better. I personally liked this line— 'Every word is a new person left in awe, every line can win awards, every stanza can change the world'. Just one thing to ask, 'Did you purposely write big stanzas (just like paragraphs), or you didn't know how to do it on this site? If it is the former, please edit it. Then it will look even better. But still it's a great work. Keep it up!
I purposefully did it. I was showing how chaos and order mix in my mind.
I LOVE THIS! It's so original and amazing it sent shivers down my spine. You definitely have a talent for writing poetry!
Wow! Excellent job! It flows very well, and is so vivid- I can really feel what you're writing. You did a wonderful job on that second paragraph, particularly "Change your nightmares and write them into fantasies and beauty." The metaphors are also very descriptive, for example: "It's the very fire that I've used to free my warriors dressed in red to fight for me on life's battlefield."
Thank you.
hey
I really liked your work, I just wanna say that "The best way to not feel hopeless is to get up and do something. Don’t wait for good things to happen to you. If you go out and make some good things happen, you will fill the world with hope, you will fill yourself with hope." (Barak Obama) so keep writing and inspiring others too.
Great choice of descriptions used for this poem. I feel like these metaphors apply to everyday life and I would like you to send me more of your work so I can revise and edit it. Thanks for the great poem.
Send you it how?
Maybe share it with my email justink10501@yahoo.com
i dunno if I'm comfortable doing that
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To start, you have a way with words. You are quite good at evoking emotion from your audience. As an aspiring writer, I found this bit of poetry very inspiring. I could easily relate to it. It makes me want to drop everything and revisit the many stories I have started but neglected.
You wrote this in a way that there is a nice rhythm to the sentences. It flows well. I especially loved the symbolism and structure of the piece. What you've written here is very powerful. I loved the line "Pen is my method, paper is my body." and also the entire second paragraph.
Great job, please keep writing!(I'm sure you will but I'm just going to say it anyway
-LW
Thank you. I intend fully to post all of my works at some point, but it's a shame that I have to have points in order to do so...