With every new day, she’ll steal my heart again.
I know that.
She’ll never let me go and
I’m very thankful for her in my life.
She loves me right?
I ask people a lot
If they think we’re meant to be.
I know we are, but I still ask.
“Are we really in love?”
Are we really in love?
I know we are, but I still ask
If they think we’re meant to be.
I ask people a lot,
“She loves me, right?”
I’m very thankful for her in my life.
She’ll never let me go and
I know that
With every new day, she’ll steal my heart again.
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Hello there. I hope to give a fair review.
I really, really loved the pattern of your poem. It reverses in sentences and still make sense! Reat work. Not much I can correct. Good grammar and punctuation. About these lines though—'If they think we’re meant to be.
I know we are, but I still ask.
“Are we really in love?” '. The middle line is related to previous one or it's successor? Please tell me. Keep up the good work.
"I ask people a lot if they think we're meant to be. I know we are, but I still ask."
"are we in love" is a stand-alone question
Thanks for telling.
Hello there, Luata here for a review. It's a bit early in the morning so you'll have to forgive me if I stop making sense. As I've said in all my other reviews, you are the author. Feel free to take my comment and use them, contest them, or ignore them as you see fit. If you have any questions, just drop a comment or PM me, I'd be happy to chat.
I personally didn't like this poem very much. It was very well written and I have no complaints about your flow or anything else. It had a nice rhythm and you have a good grasp of what you're doing. My main problem with this piece is it is something that has been written about time and time again. I'm guilty of doing the same thing, don't get me wrong. But I can't really feel the passion that should come with this poem, and even if I did, there are so many other poems like this one. You have to find a way to put a unique twist on it, something to make it yours.
I hope this was a bit helpful.
~Luata
I know I'm bad at writing love poems, but thanks for the reminder.
It wasn't bad! I actually thought it was quite good. All I was saying was it didn't seem ... original? I mean, I totally do the same thing, writing the same kind of poem over and over again ^_^
I just wish I had enough to post more...They don't give you enough per were in reviews
I can lend you some. I've been reviewing for a while now, stocking up points ^_^
You don't have to do that.