Hello Ghost it't Malcolm here for another review.
First of all: Thank you so much for explaining how to read this piece of art (and mark my words it is a true piece of art". However, I won't lie; I still messed up reading it the first time through.
Second of All: Even though I messed up reading it the first time; I am in love with it and I don't mean "love" as in I really like it. I mean love as in; I want to print it off and frame it with the words typed in really fancy font. After reading it correctly for the first time; I ended up reading it four more times. All because it sounded like you were both telling a story, singing, and speaking at the same time.
Third of All: Let me take that back; it really sounded like I was hearing your internal thoughts as you contemplate life and all the pain it brings with it. I was absorbed into your mind and all the emotion behind the words.
Fourth of All: How about those words? Your use of vocabulary was both basic and adept at the same time. Using words such as "prying" and "dense" allowed myself as the reader to feel or recognize a truly creative and insightful tone; without losing complete understanding in the process.
Fifth of All: "I know you're probably getting tired of the (Of All)". I can't even imagine the process it would take to write something in this format and still have it flow so smoothly from one line to the next. The formating of each line added a great amount of draw to the words. In other words; I was hooked into each line and it seemed as if each line break was placed scientifically.
Honestly Malcolm J Desvignes
Points: 1
Reviews: 2
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