*This story is underneath my folder titled “V.S.L. (Vampire Spy League)”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
Eliza and her sister, Cecilia, were with their friends, Marcus and Jude, in Eliza’s bedroom, watching a movie. They sat on her bed, under a fluffy gray blanket with cobweb designs stitched onto the fabric, all to keep them warm.
Mr. and Mrs. Hammond, Eliza and Cecilia’s parents, were leaving the four of them alone for the night, for they knew what it meant for the teens to finally be together and they wanted to give them some time to reconnect, to bond like they did when they were younger.
And truthfully, they were all glad to be reunited, because before, they had been kidnapped and turned into monsters, forced to work for a human-run organization that made them fight the crime that the humans could not.
Eliza and Cecilia had been made into vampires, with Cecilia being forced to play the part of “Grandmaster” for “V.S.L.” (The vampire spy league).
But Jude and Marcus had been made into demons and forced to attend “The school for demons”.
V.S.L and The school for demons were both the same place, but nobody knew it until Marcus began to see through the cracks, then, he made his escape and reunited with Eliza, informing her of the truth and leading her to free the others.
The four of them had escaped said organization and burned it to the ground in the process, but even in mundane moments like the one they were experiencing at the moment, they still wondered if it was truly gone, if they’d get taken again.
After all, they were still monsters. They couldn’t just become human. The magic and the chemicals that changed them had made that all too impossible of a feat. Sometimes, as a passing thought, they all wondered if they would ever be “normal” again, if they were just better off staying in the organization.
But that was just a passing thought and not for certain. They were all grateful to be together and hoped to have spent many more days just living boring, basic, content lives.
Well, as boring as it could get with bloodsucking vampire sisters and setting-things-on-fire brothers.
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Okay after doing a few reviews for other people's work, I'm back on familiar ground. Hi creeper
barely fazes me xd It's just... such a horrible thing that happened to them, with such widespread consequences and it's ... like just a throwaway line. It fits so well with all the other things you write :3I just want to say that I've read so much of yours that the line:
I like the idea of the dark and evil forces trying to keep the fact that there's only one school hidden. It makes me wonder why and what for and feels very mysterious! Like they only had this place but wanted to keep the vampires and demons separated.
I also like the idea of them finding strength in each other :3
Well, yes, they did want to keep them separate. To better organize them. ^v^
So good! I love the ending. I'm happy that they are back together again too. If you want, you can check me out-! First time here;D
Hey hey, it's mint, here with another review! I do hope you don't get sick of me XD Overall, I think you have a really interesting premise here with the Vampire Spy League. As some other reviewers mentioned, I think it could be more impactful and enjoyable if it was expanded. For example, this scene would feel a lot more meaningful if it carried the weight of the characters having gone through various trials and tribulations prior to it. But that's already been mentioned, so I'll try to talk about other things!
Firstly, that blanket sounds so cozy. Secondly, these sentences sounded a little clunky to me. I think the first sentence has an extra "were", and the second sentence repeats "all" three times.
This was one of the most interesting things about your story for me. I would love to know a bit more about the origins of these schools, and how exactly Marcus realized that they were the same place!
This was also quite intriguing. Would it be impossible for them to conduct research and experiments on becoming human again? Or perhaps it's enough for them to be satisfied with their current lives. Also, what about the other recruits or students? Do these four characters not wonder or worry about them?
XD Incredible. I think this is a lovely last line. It's funny, and it promises an "ever after" that might not be perfect, but that will likely have many happy moments.
Thanks for sharing, and I hope you have a wonderful day/night! =D
Thank you for your suggestions! The others escaped into their own lives and the four of them are together again.
Thank you so much for reading!
Gotcha, thanks!!
You%u2019re welcome!