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Vittoria cradled the screaming baby boys in her arms. They were twins, but conjoined to the hip.
“We can separate them through surgery, if you want.” Dr. Lucon said.
Cyril gave her a questioning look, but Vittoria simply smiled at him. It was sweet of her husband to worry, but she could handle it.
“Absolutely! But first, let me name them.” Vittoria said.
“This one will be Marcus,” Vittoria said, smoothing down his hair.
“And this one will be Jude.” Vittoria said, curling one strand of his hair with her finger.
With that, she handed them to Dr. Lucon, for though her children were beautiful, she would not raise conjoined twins and have others talk about her.
They would be normal, like other children.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
Oooh well this is quite the little tale here. A bit on the simpler side of the equation I think from the norm, and not necessarily fully wholesome or fully horrifying. This one's a bit of a middle of the road kind of situation I believe here with just an undercurrent of horror perhaps just in the way that you ended up phrasing that very last bit there I think. Something about how "they would be normal" just has vibes of them being forced to be separated even if it turns out that separating them is going to be quite a bad idea. Everything about it screams danger to me at least.
Moving past that little issue though, it looks to be mostly on the happy side and overall I think it shows a nice bit about how our parents here feel about the both of Marcus and Jude and the way they intend to treat them. On the surface it appears to be nice enough but like I said already that little undercurrent of ever so slight danger. Overall I think another solid piece and certainly one that has you guessing here.
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Kate
So glad you enjoyed!
Hello, Vampricone!
I’m here to leave a short review of your lovely short story here. I found it to be a captivating addition to Marcus’ backstory, shedding light on Vittoria’s initial disgust of her conjoined twins. The gradual build-up of Vittoria's displeasure throughout the story was a subtle and effective choice. If her bitterness had been too pronounced from the start, it might have overwhelmed the narrative. The final line, which reveals her true emotions, adds an air of finality and makes the story more impactful. With that said, I’d like to touch on one of your lines.
I love this line right here. It has such a belittling air, which shows how prideful Vittoria is. Not only does she expect her children to fit the standard of “normal,” but she also doesn’t trust her husband. It has such a gross feeling to it. But, that’s perfect for her character
Overall, you managed to pack quite a punch in this story despite its short length. I’m impressed! Thanks for tagging me for this story; I enjoyed reviewing it!
Happy Writing!
Wist
Glad you enjoyed!