Splinter

by backgroundbob

Published December 24, 2005

In Old Poems [terrible]

This is a very... involved poem. The rhythm, and how it related to the content (especially the last few lines) are very important, and a bit hard to understand. I hope someone get the idea.


SPLINTER

'Twas in the wood I got it
.....A consummate art, I the artist;
.....you lag, but covet quickly barbs and spears
.....I thought were mine alone.
.....I calculate, quick, but careful,
.....and should I slip? whose heart is harshest,
.....and whose heart winces yet?

But then I could not find it
.....It's turn and turn about, you tell me;
.....no words, but bloody gestures here and there
.....that serve to suppurate.
.....I twist myself, wise, but silent,
.....and as for you? I taught you knifeplay,
.....yet now my hands are knifed.

So in my hand I took it
.....Our two spectators circle, mournful;
.....patient, but fearful yet for final blows
.....that sever limbs and ties.
.....You shatter me, stained, but vengeful,
.....and what's the price? my shivered edges,
.....cutting as they tumble.

And homeward did I bring it
.....Is it thicker or thinner, bad blood;
.....flowing, but sluggish here and there ablaze
.....engulfing all who care.
.....I hope in fear, mute, but longing,
.....and why the cage? pride binds my words fast,
.....and silences the tongue.

Splintered; even here.

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Snoink
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Snoink commented Comment · Dec 28, 2005

Gah... you have such a dry tone. Why can't you be angsty and overdramatic like everyone else?

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Whatsarahsaid
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Whatsarahsaid wrote a review Review · Dec 27, 2005

I loved it, the language is so sharp and coarse. I'm not sure I understood it, I did try!

"and why the cage? pride binds my words fast,
.....and silences the tongue.

Splintered; even here." My favourite part :D

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BettyPaige
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BettyPaige wrote a review Review · Dec 24, 2005

Wow, bob, this is really good.

Knifing is such a cool verb.

This was my favorite part, 'It's turn and turn about, you tell me; / no words, but bloody gestures here and there'. Awesome imagery there.

Again, nice work.


Bette



“Hope” is the thing with feathers - That perches in the soul - And sings the tune without the words - And never stops - at all -
— Emily Dickinson