The love we once shared I shall forget not,
I guess for you it diminished the day we fought.
I shall kiss you once again if you' d let me,
How strong my love is still for you, you shall see.
My loyalty was what you had started to doubt on,
So that ' scene' in the drama obviously left you torn.
But then my career was important to me too,
Apart from you, I thought I had other things to do.
But that was the biggest mistake I ever made,
For it caused your love for me to slowly fade.
But, my dearest, I shall make it up to you if you' d allow me,
Then, forever you and me together shall be.
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This poem was enjoyable, the words flowed very nicely.
'For it caused your love for me to slowly fade.'
I found this line beautifully painful to read. I did like your subject matter too, I've not seen very many poems using this subject. It's unusually and it works well, always nice to see something not normally done.
However, I felt like the poem could use some better imagery. More metaphors and smilies. This would really add more depth to your poem. Other than that I really enjoyed it.
Keep up the good work!
Thanks for your advice XD
Hey Anshira, I really loved your poem. It was simple yet addictive. There was a plain truth and also hard feelings beautifully put together.
But that was the biggest mistake I never made,
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I didn't understand this line.But other than that this was a very good poem.Keep up your good work. Keep writing!!!
Cheers!!!
Heyy Anshira! Sapphire to the review!
I should tell you, its a really good poem and ten thousand times better than my poems, seriously.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading the poem and also the flow and it is well-written.
The emotions expressed for you're love is very sweet especially the way you have expressed in you're poem.
I loved the last lines of you're poem:
"But, my dearest, I shall make it up to you if you' d allow me,
Then, forever you and me together shall be.
Overall the poem is very sweet and nice
Keep it up and Good luck!
Have a nice day
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Thanks for helping me out with your review. XD
Ahh I dint help you a lot!
Anyway you're welcome!