Young Writers Society

Via!

Great poem. In fact, very random and I completely agree with you. That simplicity of colors are gone, and everyone now just wants so many bright colors. *sigh*

Only one thing, I think the ends was a little too... Maybe sudden? Like BAM! Its ended, when the poem's just half way through that feeling. I guess, maybe a few more paragraph's would make this a great poem.

Also, the second paragraph does not have even lines! :O But its okay. I think you've done great! Nothing else to say. Love it. <3'

Keep Writing! ~

Cookie <3'

Hey,
this is really good. Very enjoyable, a few bits that I will pick out for you, (seeing that I'm suppose to be reviewing you).
Ok so firstly, the flow is lovely and really genuine and not forced at all.
It is a really simple and nice poem that says exactly what you want to say without forcing it or making it blunt. For this I applaud you. My favourite part is

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but every bit as special.