Young Writers Society

Hi!
Your imagery is fantastic! You feel as though you're immersed within the speakers feelings and thoughts, and that's something which I'm still learning to do (as a poet), so well done for that. My favourite line is "your angelic calming nature, giving and caring and selflessly" you really visualise the person the speaker is speaking about, in a heavenly and bright nature which I think it's really clever the way that you've done that. My only suggestion for a change would be in stanza 2 (the last line) and change melody to heavenly to immerse the reader in the angelic imagery you create. Well done!
Keep writing

Dang. This slaps. The visual poetry is so vivid. I can taste the honey and almond milk, and picture the beautiful angel with the cursive voice and caring hands. Somehow the lavender pigments soothe my soul, and I can feel the pool of ink filling up her skull, and I can’t help but plead with you that she'll let the darkness flow into that beautiful story that waits on the pages of her lifetime before it’s too late. I want to see her, partly because I’ve got a thing for girls sans curves, and partly because I’ve got a thing for girls with big hearts who understand what it’s like to go through the dark stuff that made up many years of my life, and I wonder if I could tell her in all honesty that she is one of the most beautiful girls I’ve ever seen. It’s too bad that lavender girls are too often exactly what people need, but they’re too afraid to open they’re hearts to something so real. And on that note, your friend is a singer and a writer of ~17? Set me up plz loll.
I wish the two of you health, strength and wisdom enough to overcome the cowardly demons that would do all they can to hold back an angelic soul from spreading their love to those who would receive it.

Hi Quennie, thank you for sharing your work. This poem flows really nicely due to the structure you created. My only comment would be on this part:

"But you can’t see in cursive

your eyes are fogged and tainted

by society’s twisted standards,

amplifying your profound insecurities"

In my opinion "twisted" it's not necessary here, cause I tend to avoid placing too many adjectives together but is just just a suggestion!

Hello there! I'm here for a short review. And to tell you that I enjoy reading this poem and I love the way you wrote it out. I enjoyed reading this story because you didn't capitalize unnecessarily and wrote it out your way, in your style. I think it's a beautiful piece of writing and I have a little suggestion for you on it.

you sing in cursive.

your words like tea, honey, and a hint

of almond milk

but i see you in cursive.
your angelic, calming nature,
giving and caring and selflessly

you write in cursive.
your papers engraved with alluring designs.
elegant, continuous, looped, and connected,
flowing with a rhythmic, patterned grace.