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i'm sorry

by Queenie


“i’m sorry”

he whispered

softly, ashamed

eyes fastened to the floor

tears streaking down his face

~

“i’m sorry”

he repeated

hoping you’d listen

wishing you’d say “it’s ok”

that life could go on the same way

~

“i’m sorry”

he pleaded

but you wouldn’t sway

you knew his heart

was engraved with another’s name

~

“i’m sorry”

you laughed

for those words

lost all meaning to you

~

“i’m sorry”

his excuse

time after time

his remedy to your pain

~

“i’m sorry”

you stated

rejecting his empty promises

refusing to be treated that way

~

“i’m not sorry”

you corrected

standing up for your pride

for your future, your worth, your life


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Mon May 18, 2020 1:40 pm
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madisonperkins59 wrote a review...



I loved your poem. I think this really shows how people say I'm sorry without really meaning it and expected the person to accept their apology. I really liked the last stanza because it's telling the other person that they're not saying sorry because they mean it. You have a great writing style, Keep writing!




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Thanks for the review!



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Wed May 13, 2020 2:21 pm
mememimer says...



It calls out to all those not committed to what they call a 'relationship'.

"“i’m not sorry”
you corrected
standing up for your pride
for your future, your worth, your life"

Loved the last stanza that highlights the fact that you are not the problem in the relationship, the other person is. The other person who neglected your feelings, used you and hurt you. There's a much greater opportunity, yet to come.

You have an impressive writing style.

P.S. calling my friends to beat him up (lol)

Keep writing!

Best wishes,
I




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mememimer wrote a review...



It calls out to all those not committed to what they call a 'relationship'.

"“i’m not sorry”
you corrected
standing up for your pride
for your future, your worth, your life"

Loved the last stanza that highlights the fact that you are not the problem in the relationship, the other person is. The other person who neglected your feelings, used you and hurt you. There's a much greater opportunity, yet to come.

You have an impressive writing style.

P.S. calling my friends to beat him up (lol)

Keep writing!

Best wishes,
I




Queenie says...


Thanks for the review!



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Sat May 09, 2020 5:26 pm
Ram Hood 001 wrote a review...



All right! Betrayal, not specifically, not intentionally, remains a betrayal. And even thousands of apologies will not release the load of disappointments.
And the once beloved and very close person will suddenly turn into a completely alien.
Above all, take care of your heart, do not open your heart to the first person you meet ...




Queenie says...


Thanks for the review!



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this is amazing mate though this is the one message you will get from this account test meassage Kara haha





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