Hey there! Plume here, with a review!!
Oh man. You did such a great job of conveying a feeling of utter hopelessness through your words. I loved all your descriptive imagery; I think your word choice was especially strong. It worked really nicely to create this piece of hopelessness and despair. Really nice work!!
One thing I absolutely loved was the flow. I think you did a super nice job with that nearly circular ending, going back to the phrase "crash onto the shore" and "exhausting all our strength." It really encapsulated that feel of doing the same thing over again and not learning from mistakes and the despair that comes with it. Starting your beginning with "and" also lent itself to the idea that the readers were coming into something already in progress, furthering those ideas of the same cycle. I think your consistent line length was also really lovely and served to build up that rhythm and poetic-ness really nicely.
I loved how you related it to the waves, too. Swimming tirelessly really encapsulates hopelessness as well, especially the fatigue that comes along with it. Your metaphors throughout the poem were absolutely lovely and worked so well to further the overall mood and tone of your poem. My interpretation of this would be something along the lines of people being stuck in a hard situation. It just speaks of that despair and hopelessness that creeps up when it seems like there's no way out of a situation, and that only makes the stuck feeling even worse.
Overall: I really enjoyed this poem! I think you did a really nice job of encapsulating the emotions involved, and your flow and formatting were absolutely delightful in selling those emotions. I hope to read more of your poetry soon! Until next time!!
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