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This was an amazing poem. I have never seen anyone describe the feeling of dreams better, maybe in inception haha. You used so many phrases that with so little words perfectly describe how it feels to be trapped between reality and dream, and then to fall completely into the dreams. I especially liked the line "Whispered words, of the half-asleep". I'm the kind of guy who says a lot of weird stuff when half-asleep so that one hit me personally haha. The whole poem has this mysterious dreamy feeling around it, which ties perfectly with it's theme. You also talk about the subject of night thoughts, "About the what-might-have-beens And the shouldn't-have-dones", which gives this poem so much personality. I do not want to abuse the word relatable, but that's what it is. Those verses also let us know in a way, that there's a person behind all of it, that these are someone's expieriences, and the dreams are partially an outcome of them. Great work!

Hi Niveda,
a really nice poem you got there, I really like your choice of words!

Dreams that drift

Into wispy nothings,

Turbulent changes

Like a chaotic sea,

Between dream to dream,

With no in-between.

Hi Niveda! Anne here to leave a quick review.
First of all, I really have to applaud you for the theme you've chosen. It's wonderful, great and really relatable!!

MEANING
The poem was very meaningful. Right before we fall asleep, we do experience those made-up scenarios of how things would be better than they are. Either it to remove the bad things or to insert all the pleasant new ones.
I especially loved the third-person narration in this poem, as if the poet you is observing the normal you doing the midnight ponderings. I really loved that idea!!

LANGUAGE
The language was beautiful.

Between dream to dream,

With no in-between

About the what-might-have-beens

And the shouldn't-have-dones,

These thoughts form a maze

In your puzzled-up brain,

Of soft slumber,

Whispered words

Of the half-asleep.

Turbulent changes

Like a chaotic sea,

Hey, there! Nice job on this poem. It's so relatable, and you've captured the feeling pretty well. The way you've depicted dreams and thoughts as the sea help form a good mental image. I like how the first part seems to be describing half-awake, senseless almost-dreams that come as you're falling asleep, but then the poem proceeds to discuss more serious thoughts about regrets and possibilities. Great job!

I have no words, for you had said them all. This poem was absolutely incredible, im being serious. now lets get on to the review.
Glows
- structure. This poems consistent structure gave a sort of flowyness to the piece and added to the message.
- word choice. Your word choice was somewhat light and dreamy such as the midnight ponderings you talk about in this poem.

Grows
-repeats. although you word choice was amazing, sometimes you repeated the came word in lines next or close together. this isn't really a problem, however if you say idt out loud it is very easy to trip over your own words,

...And thats all folks. I really enjoyed reading your peice. keep writing!
1dratherbewriting out

Hi, NivedaJames22!
Here's a short review for you today!

Gentle murmurs

Of soft slumber,

Whispered words

Of the half-asleep.

Turbulent changes

Like a chaotic sea,

Between dream to dream,

With no in-between.

Midnight ponderings<br>
Over mindless matters,<br>
Dreams that drift<br>
Into wispy nothings,<br>
One minute it's there,<br>
The next it's not.<br>
<br>
Gentle murmurs<br>
Of soft slumber,<br>
Whispered words<br>
Of the half-asleep.<br>
Turbulent changes<br>
Like a chaotic sea,<br>
Between dream to dream,<br>
With no in-between.<br>
<br>
And then there's the thoughts<br>
That float around in tranquility,<br>
As you lie awake<br>
Right before you fall asleep.<br>
<br>
Those midnight ponderings<br>
Over mindless matters,<br>
About the what-might-have-beens<br>
And the shouldn't-have-dones,<br>
These thoughts form a maze<br>
In your puzzled-up brain,<br>
Just before you nod off,<br>
And drift into dreams.<br>

These thoughts form a maze

In your puzzled-up brain,

Just before you nod off,

And drift into dreams.

This is a good poem.