Sometimes I feel a gnawing
Deep within my heart.
I wonder about all the things
That I had to say
But didn't.
~
Every word, every phrase
That should have left me,
Stays deep within me still
Taunting me,
Hauntingly.
~
These words, they're like
Ghosts who stay
Near me even in the dark.
They burn me and ask
To be said aloud.
~
They make me think of
Past things gone,
Friends who've left,
Fun that's done.
All over now.
~
They deride me, calling me
A coward, a weakling,
One who can't speak out
What they
Want to say.
~
One day, I think I'll burst
And spew out those
Words that I never said
Those words
Left unsaid.
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Wow! This poem is so utterly relatable. I always tend to hold my anger inside... And one fine day, it might burst out. I really love how you've captured that in words. Even the word choice gives that chilll.
One thing I really want to know, where do you get your ideas from? Do you have like a fountain in your head where you can just grab what suits you best? Or do you just pick random events from life and write about them? 'Cause I've read all your poems, and all of their themes stand out, and make me go 'How d'ya think that up?'
I think this was your best stanza;
I absolutely love the imagery.
And this:
A perfect ending.
I especially like the way you end all (most!?) of your poems with the name of the poem. Or is it the other way round? Maybe you decide the name based on your last line.
Anyway, that really completes the whole thing, and it's like giving a personal signature.
Your style is also really unique, that if I read a poem of yours, I can go 'Hey, maybe that's
NivedaJames22's!' (Or whatever you like to be called.)
I also love the way your words simply roll off the tongue. My favourite line, based on the smoothness, is
Speaking about that stanza, there's just one thing I'd like to point out, just a simple grammar mistake. Maybe that's done on purpose.
In the second line of the second stanza, you say,
I think you meant 'that should have left me' or 'that should leave me'.
Anyway, this poem was reaaaallly good.
Keep Writing!
Hey Phillauthet!
About this, I guess its sort of like a combination of both...sometimes the lines just sort of come to me while I'm doing something completely different, and at other times, it's more of what I'm actually feeling, but most of the times its a little bit of both.
About this, I honestly never noticed that I do that, but in retrospect I guess I do. I don't usually try to force that but sometimes, it just feels right I guess.
Thanks for pointing that out. I hadn't picked up on that error.
About this, thank you so much!! I'm so glad you get that feeling!
Thanks for the review!
Have a great day/night!
No problem! ^_^
Hello,
Hi. I was reading your poem, and I absolutely loved it. My favorite type of poem is the short, unhindered, and heartfelt ones everyone can relate to. I once made a poem similar to this, but more about insecurities. I love the style, and the meaning behind this poem. It spoke to me, and I'm sure it spoke, and will speak, to many others.
Thank you!
Hey emivanz here for a short review (or a long one idk)
This was such an amazing poem that I think we can all relate to. you wonderfully described the words we all mean to say, but never do.
Glows
This poem flowed really well. I could just hear each stanza roll off the tongue.
It was the perfect tone. I imagine this poem to be sort of airy, floaty sort of piece. One that is almost like the words you cant always get out, floating.
Grows
there were not a lot of these, (the poem was so well written.)
The only thing i didn't understand was the line, "Friends who've left ,fun" why was the word fun added in there.
overall this poem was an incredibly work, and i hope you write more!
your friend
Emivanz
Thanks for reviewing!
This is so relatable and beautifully written
Thank you!
Glad you liked it!