Wow! This poem is so utterly relatable. I always tend to hold my anger inside... And one fine day, it might burst out. I really love how you've captured that in words. Even the word choice gives that chilll.
One thing I really want to know, where do you get your ideas from? Do you have like a fountain in your head where you can just grab what suits you best? Or do you just pick random events from life and write about them? 'Cause I've read all your poems, and all of their themes stand out, and make me go 'How d'ya think that up?'
I think this was your best stanza;
These words, they're like
Ghosts who stay
Near me even in the dark.
They burn me and ask
To be said aloud.
I absolutely love the imagery.
And this:
One day, I think I'll burst
And spew out those
Words that I never said
Those words
Left unsaid.
A perfect ending.
I especially like the way you end all (most!?) of your poems with the name of the poem. Or is it the other way round? Maybe you decide the name based on your last line.
Anyway, that really completes the whole thing, and it's like giving a personal signature.
Your style is also really unique, that if I read a poem of yours, I can go 'Hey, maybe that's
NivedaJames22's!' (Or whatever you like to be called.)
I also love the way your words simply roll off the tongue. My favourite line, based on the smoothness, is
Taunting me,
Hauntingly.
Speaking about that stanza, there's just one thing I'd like to point out, just a simple grammar mistake. Maybe that's done on purpose.
In the second line of the second stanza, you say,
That should left me,
I think you meant 'that should have left me' or 'that should leave me'.
Anyway, this poem was reaaaallly good.
Keep Writing!
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Reviews: 76
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