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And the review juggernaut rolls on. (I must finish this. I must finish this)
First Impression: THINGS ARE HAPPENING!!! My suspicions seem to be correct. Overall well written and conveys a good amount of mystery.
Isaac’s back was extremely sore from laying down in the same position for hours. Thankfully though, the shard of glass was removed from his side and he was able to continue work.
It took hours to remove the shard of glass? Seems unlikely.
“Welcome to my office, Isaac Johnson. I hear you were the one to pinpoint the location of Unknown number one’s base of operations. An impressive feat. Do you have anything to say about your heroics?”
“Um… well... “ It took all of Isaac’s brain power to keep a straight face with all of the giddy excitement mixed with the extreme social anxiety that he was feeling. “Err, I was just doing my job, sir.”
“Ah, yes, and you did your job brilliantly. Now, I believe that you deserve a promotion. Do you agree, young Johnson?”
“Um… if you think I should, I think I should.” What else am I going to say? That I totally deserve a promotion? That I don’t deserve a promotion? thought Isaac. Donnovan laughed. His laugh was deep and something seemed… almost sinister about it. Sinister? Don’t be ridiculous, Isaac. He’s a hero, he chided himself.
“Well, a tactful answer. Yes, I believe you should get a promotion. Isaac Johnson, you are officially being promoted to head Inspector,” said Donnovan.
“H-head in-inspector?” gasped Isaac. Head Inspector! He can’t be serious, he doubted.
“Yes. Head inspector. Our last head inspector was disposed of- I mean fired, for... well, lets just say she began investigating some, uh, things that she shouldn’t have been.”
Isaac didn’t notice the strange thing his boss just said. He was too star-struck by the incredible promotion. I just don’t believe it! This time he couldn’t keep a grin off his face. He tried to force it off, but it didn’t want to leave.
“Also, you’re getting a pay-raise to $300,000 a year,” added Donnovan Gaver.
Isaac began to fear that his stupid grin might become permanent if he got any more good news. “I-I don’t know what to say,” he said. “Thank you.”
“Save your sentiments. This is a very difficult job. Here is the password to the top-secret information about all the Unknowns that we are investigating and capturing.” Donnovan handed Isaac a slip of paper. It had the password on it, which was a bunch of random letters and numbers. “If you tell or reveal in any way to anybody this password, you will be immediately fired and the password shall be changed.”
“I understand,” said Isaac solemnly.
I love this whole exchange. You've finally given Isaac that extra couple of traits that make him more unique as a character. It's really well done.
Since he was now head inspector, he had to assign different people to different jobs, put together facts, and, of course, inspect things.
This seems a little unrealistic. Wouldn't he have to like learn the ropes a bit before commanding people. If we knew more about Isaac's rank in this organization maybe we'll know better but this seems like he's starting work much too quickly.
Several hours later as he was looking through the files on various things, he found something strange. What is this? he thought. The file had no title. He clicked on it. What…? he thought as he read the short text, his eyes widening.
This is a message to the head inspector after me. You don’t know what you’re getting into. Please leave now while you still can.
"Theory Confirmed," says my subconscious.
All he could get from the stubborn memory was that there was something more to this place than simply trying to deal with extraterrestrials. Something that even the people working here weren’t supposed to know. Something unusual.
Something horrifying.
Okay that was some really nice writing there. Now we are all going to be on the lookout to figure out what on Earth happened in that room. Like I said earlier I hope we found out but I feel that there is a lot of stuff going on here. Lots of theories.
And I almost don't have to say this anymore but once again an amazing ending that keeps us wanting to read more.
As always not trying to be harsh. Take what you think is useful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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