- the stinging tang
- the wafting breeze
- the jangle of [. . .]
- [. . . ] the motor keys
- the car at home
- the headlights on
- the night in Rome
- the night is gone
- the heavy feet
- the heady breath
- the musty sheet
- the waking death
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Cool poem! I believe this is about leaving and the scent of home never leaving you.My favorite parts in the poem were these lines:”The night is gone” and “the waking death” Both are simple sentences but have meaning behind them.They talk about leaving behind something dear,like home.I enjoyed reading this.Nice Job and have a good day!
Thanks for the review! I enjoyed reading your interpretation of this piece.
Hello Hikari here with a review! Let's get right into it.
I'm not entirely sure what the [. . .] meant but I liked the rest of the poem!
The last Line was powerful wasn't expected it. And I like the ryhmes you had in here.
{the night in Rome
- the night is gone}
I also really like these two lines!
It was a good poem, kudos! ♥
Thanks for the review! I used [. . .] to add a sort of pause/ anticipatory effect there, but it doesn't really have a particular meaning. I might remove it if I revise this poem.