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This was a lovely poem, and I loved the way you played with imagery and word choice. I felt like the reduction of each line by three words gave the poem an interesting feel, like something that was slowly dwindling away. It added a feeling of suspense, and the fact that each of the last lines was only two words gave it a nice feeling of closure, but also promise. I came away from the poem feeling like there was more to the poem than what was directly stated in the words; I felt like there was a lot implied in the spaces between the words that could be explored.
Ants are an interesting and unconventional choice to write a poem about, but you pulled it off really well. The success of the poem is due, I think, to the beauty of your descriptions, and the use of figurative language. I love the way you describe "a mountain" in the eyes of the ants, which implies a sense of grandeur and infinity, and makes ant's eyes, a mundane object, seem special. It was also a clever way to introduce the mountain, and it's relation to the ant. I also loved the idea of "growing snowcaps". This description really seemed very unique to me, and the vagueness of the description made it all the more appealing. You included just enough detail to hook me, as the reader, without giving me everything, so I am left to put together the pieces on my own, which makes me more invested in the poem as a whole.
In the second stanza I was a bit confused by the comparison of an ant moving to a "tangle of wires yanked from their socket". The simile just didn't seem to click in my mind; in my experience, tangles of wire are large and complicated and move in slow, uneven movements, but an ant is small and coordinated and quick. I thought it was creative, as I've never heard someone compare something to a tangle of wire in a socket, but it didn't really work for me. However, I loved the alliteration of "small silver stones", which I think referred to snowflakes- if so, it's a clever way to describe snowflakes. And then the last line held so much feeling and emotion, since it captured the perspective of the ant as well as the surrounding environment. There's a sense of suspense in that last line, that makes me wonder what happened next.
This whole poem made me feel so much wonder and awe. It's really well written, and my only complaint is that it isn't longer! I wish I could read more about this ant and its life.

This poem is ok though
The comparisons are dope


"The ant was towering over me with its feelers bulbous red.

I saw a mountain in its eyes,

black-light reflected, pale grey shadow --

growing snowcaps.

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It began to move like a tangle of wires yanked from their socket

and I saw fear in its round eyes,

watching the small silver stones

change imperceptibly"

The general feel of the poem is good

Hey there, and happy RevMo! Plume here, with a review!

I don't think I've ever reviewed your poetry before, so this was a real treat for me!! You're a real stellar poet, and I really enjoyed reading this poem of yours! It was really nicely structured and so simple yet very thought provoking at the same time.

One thing I liked was the overall flowy-ness of it. It sort of helped me realize how even without repetition and structure and rhyme/syllable things, just the length of lines can help create a really nice flow within a poem. It's so subtle too, but it still works really nicely in the overall scheme of the poem. Nice work!

I also love love loved your use of contrast here. I think the difference in sizes really subverts the reader's expectations. I had to read the beginning twice just to make sure I'd read it correctly, because I'm so used to towering over an ant rather than the other way around! The "mountain in its eyes" also served to further that concept of largeness you had going. One size aspect that I did wonder about was what was meant by small silver stones. I can only assume given the reverse size thing you have going on that in real life they're large silver stones, but I couldn't find in my mind something that would make sense in the context. I'd love to hear your purpose behind the line, though, since I'm not always the best at analyzing poetry!

One thing I did wonder about was the color scheme in your first stanza. As I read, you mention the bulbous red, the mountain reflection, the pale grey shadow and snowcaps. Those all (to me at least) conjure up more muted tones, with the red standing out but still within the color scheme. You continue that sort of muted neutral color imagery throughout too, with the mention of the silver stones. The one thing that didn't seem to fit was the "black light" bit. To me, I always associate black light with fluorescent colors. I thought it was an interesting choice, especially given that you were talking about the ant's eyes. I could also read the black light line as something like the light reflecting off of the ant's black eyes, though, and I think that does make more sense, but given the alternate meaning black light has, it wasn't where my thoughts went immediately.

Also: love the tiny figurative language devices sprinkled throughout. The "tangle of wires yanked from the socket" bit was a really gorgeous simile, and the alliteration in "small silver stones" is just so satisfying to me.

Overall: I thoroughly enjoyed this poem!! Within its simplicity were some really killer images and lines, and it provided a really unique perspective on the world. Nice work, and until next time!!