My bad, but I'm boring. I am grey castles,
grey hairs on the heads of kings
and red on the skulls of martyred knights.
I'm a princess who didn't hold the sword.
I'm a queen who sat pretty beheaded.
And you see, I told you you'd get bored.
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I eat swiss rolls pink and puffy, by the book,
and let the ants charge them and die
on the way out, without doing something
to stop the carnage. Sorry, I'm just too conventional,
I take my tea in the same room as my fairy tale books,
it's almost special. It almost made you look.
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This was awesome. This had so much blah to the world and life i lived but it did come back to life at the end with almost made you look. This is awesome too, but it opened the poem up to another space for story or experiene, try to keep to one kind of story.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Hey there! I enjoyed reading this poem. I like how you bring the reader's attention to one who claims to be boring. Starting out by saying, "I'm boring" has an unexpected way of being intriguing, sort of like telling someone, "Don't look." It's the type of introduction they'd normally advise speakers against, but can also be used as a tasteful opening, in writing, anyway.
I like how this is clearly formatted and easy to read. I didn't notice any spelling errors, so great work with that. The two distinct stanzas also make it convenient for reading.
I appreciate how you have brought into focus something very ordinary and made it poetic. The whole concept there is inspiring. Thanks for sharing your work!
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Lovely poem! I think this is about a common type of side character we may read about in fairytales and how they are overlooked.Maybe,it’s them sharing their feelings.Maybe this person wants to be heard and has a story to tell,but no one will listen to the person,because they’re “too boring.” Like the review before,the last line of the poem was my favorite.I hope you have a good day/night.
Thanks for the review!
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Firstly, I was not aware there were pink swiss rolls! I had to look it up haha.
Secondly, I think my favorite line is the last one.
"I take my tea in the same room as my fairy tale books,
it's almost special. It almost made you look."
I did sort of feel like I was reading this poem out of the corner of my eye.
It's interesting that you compare not stopping carnage with being "too conventional".
The title is well suited to this poem.
I do wonder how the poem would read if the pacing/formatting was arranged differently?
I noticed that the colors mentioned are grey, red, and pink. It might be interesting to bring focus to the colors of things to create more of a through line.
This was and interesting read. Thank you for sharing your art!
Best Wishes <3
Thanks for the review! That's a good idea about the colours - I might try that.