Young Writers Society

Hello! My name is Via and I'm here for a review. So... let's get started.

First and foremost, I love a good nature poem. I love how you utilize the snapdragon as it's one "character" and personality. The descriptions of the thought process of the narrator are well thought out and well written, kudos to you for that! I love how you left the poem vague in a way, allowing the reader to decide for themselves whether the narrator is an actual snapdragon, or maybe to other readers delving deep might find the whole nature idea a metaphor for a person's life.

Thank you so much for fixing auto capitalization. Auto cap is the bane of all poets and some on this forum forget about that, so thank you so much! The poem is very clear cut and concise with formatting and word scheme. I didn't find many words or phrases that are off putting on the rhythm. Clearly from the way this is written, you must be good at editing your own work. Great utilization of punctuation, too. I didn't find any lines that were obsolete or unnecessary for the overall theme. Diction wise, the vocabulary and word choices are very simple, which for a poem of this nature (no pun intended) and style. I like the simple imagery and figurative language.

My favorite lines in particular are

I would be a snapdragon at the foot of your garden,

vermillion flash in the sea-foam grasses,

watching and waiting for you to change.

But maybe more so your funnel-gaze, locked onto

the square of office-grade paper making up your world

and meanwhile,

me there, in full-bloom, with no one to write about it,

whereas you call yourself

a nature poet.

Hello hello, mint here for a review! Just a quick disclaimer-- I'm not an expert at reviewing poetry, and I'm unfamiliar with most of the ~fancier~ terms, so this review will probably be just me commenting randomly on all the parts I liked! (Honestly I couldn't find anything to critique here ^-^) Anyways, on to the review...

vermillion flash in the sea-foam grasses

So I wave in the breeze like a waggling finger

pulsating with frustration at the person you will always be.

I watch you write about yourself constantly,

This is a lovely poem of nature. I appreciate the role of nature poet. It is important to write regularly. The comparison of breeze with finger is interesting.