This is simply amazing! I love how it reminds me of the sirens myth for example the lines: "And still that eerie melodyThat's calling from the deep,And still I know that harmony,I'll take eternal sleep"The description is simply amazing. The flow of this piece is great. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece! I am looking forward to reading more of your works.
Hi Arkhaion! Niteowl here to offer a quick review! Overall, I really liked this. I could totally hear a bunch of big burly men singing it in my head. It has a really strong rhythm and feels like a sailor's song. Just a couple tiny things.
But if I die, I'm history,My name will be dissolved in sea foam
And here we feast on misery,And here, on despair, on sea foam
Okay, I don't how much of a review this will be or if will help. But I'm going to go ahead anyways. First off, I love the poem. It's beautiful and mysterious and still descriptive in it's own way. I feel like it was about a sailor trying to get home or rather torn between going home and choosing his inevitable death. Am I right? I honestly didn't see anything wrong with this poem and find it to be somehow sweet but kind of dark.So, since I doubt this will help you, keep writing and Happy Valentine's Day!
Love it but don't put a capital letter without putting a full stop first
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