Heart of Glass
I have a heart of glass,
one hundred heart breaks weigh on my shoulders.
I have a heart of glass,
a punch from you is like a vase falling to the floor,
And breaking to a million pieces.
I have a heart of glass,
if dropped i wont be able to be put back together.
I have a heart of glass
once again in honor of my granny
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the smiley was an accident i was trying the diffrent ones out and didnt backspace, sorry for the confusion
The imagery is great, but I think you should review and edit the poem and make sure it is really what you are trying to say before posting it. Also, the poem is about heart break, so why is there a smiley at the end? It doesn't really make sense.
It looks like you had a spelling mistake.
Also, i feel like this sentence is too long. Maybe...
maybe something like that.
i love it!!!!!!!!
Once again, I don't want to see the smiley face at the end of your poem (if it is part of the poem.). Nor, the font color. I liked this poem better than the other one I read by you
O.K. so, I like this poem. But, it could use a lot of improvement, and like I said before repetition adds more oomph to the poem when it is less obvious. I think this has way more affect:
I guess It could be just me though. I really did like the poem anyway.
Thanks for the good read and P.M. me if you have any questions,
A. S.